Interesting...I know the monster is Sakajun, but this doesn't really sound like Shuurei...it's someone else and my imagination fails me at the moment. But this is beautiful.

Otaku Mom

Very lovely. I see .hack influence... or is it just a coincedence? (hmm... did I spell that right?) :D However, if I'm understanding this poem correctly, the "lost ones" refer to those that have died, right? ... right?

I think it's very interesting how you added in the "monster" aspect. I'm sure Shuurei felt guilty for his death since she was partially responsible with the whole water and Gan Lu tea thing. But then again, she didn't know until he told her. So, I think she might have thought of herself a bit of a "monster" who had killed a living being. She didn't care if Sakujun had brought sorrow and destruction, all she cared about was that he was a living, breathing human being and she was the main catalyst that had ended his life.

Or at least, all that I wrote above was what I thought and perceived from the poem. Haha... I think pretty weird sometimes so I might have misunderstood something... But thank you for this wonderful work! You have made my day. ~the key of the twilight