lmao can't wait till this is updated it's just so not hermionie i loeve it.

VEry NIce :+) Can't wait to find out more

-Lu

LOL!

Get the the party she was preparing for, she can give a drunken display(action)and/or confession!

-Lu

Um, yeah... RoraLupin's right... its a funny story, but ur TWELVE?!?!?!?i think you need to lay off the HP for a couple days and shut ur brain down with cartoons and sugar... this isnt healthy... um, George was watching?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!?? *Brain malfuntition* RoraLupin is reading over me shoulder, and she says ur crazy, no offense... im gonna go TOSS SOME COOKYS NOW!ew he was watching, twice!

Um okay; but George was watching?! Its a good story but I think you've got some "issues".

WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO UPDATE!

okay, first things first, if is have 3,0 typos on this review, its cuz my brain has temporarily shut down for the next three hours, um, second, it's fun to read, because i dont support the whole Smape/Herminy thing, but i love to read ur story cuz i think its hilarious.um, my brain shut down as i ve alredy said, so i foregto what i was gonna say, oh yeah, (its trying to come back, but the thought of hemione pregnant pushed it away), what would their baby look like if hermione WAS/IS pregnant?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!?ah!

Write more,Where is this story going? Need to know more!

lol thats all i can say lol

Awesome! It's been so long. Remember me? I'm glad you updated, though it needs some editing.

lol that was great!

not a bad story,but you have to develope your characters a little better.

Okay. Now I'm glad I didn't review every chapter. I'm responding to your email you sent me:

"So, what do you mean by more "descriptive"? I would be intrested to hear what the faults of this story are, and there are more chapters just so you know. I'm 12 so it's not like I have that much experince."

I didn't realize you were 12 so maybe descriptive may not be the best thing for me to say. Also, working with whether a character is speaking or just thinking thoughts in their mind. That was also confusing.

Descriptive...For example the conversation between Severus and Hermione upon finding herself in bed with Snape. She would have been more revulsed as would Snape.

In character. As people's versions of Snape come and go, he probably wouldn't have said what he said either. I'm not sure how to help you further here.

I know I'm asking a lot out of you and maybe writing about such stuff at an early age (sorry, I'm an old lady) may not be what you wish to do with your story. However, I am not the author so you ca toss this comment if you wish.

Believability. Why would Hermione go to Snape's rooms? Is there some secret crush she has on him? It would seem to me that maybe she would go somewhere (such as the room of requirement) to drink. Just a thought. There has to be more than, well, she thought Snape would be sleep anyway. Why not Dumbledore's office or even the Quiddich pitch where no one would suspect she's there.

I know this is a lot so please feel free to email me at

I guess this is seriously unedited. Don't do that again. If you need an editor or a beta get one - the premise of this story isn't bad but the way you're writing it is.

I do like (somewhat) the idea. Good luck.