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| Opaul 2008-08-30 ch 1,  | abusehaha. |
| zuzuluver 2008-07-27 ch 1, | abusethat was nice :] but i think it would've been much better if mai just went with it you know |
| O.oCharmedAnimeGirlo.O 2008-07-15 ch 1, | abuseShe never did slit his throat |
| sara 2008-05-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseokay... |
| maiko22 2008-01-25 ch 1, | abuseThis was alright. You should have a beta look it over, it's often hard to notice your own spelling errors, especially when they form other words and the spell check doesn't catch it. The only one I remember off the top of my head is 'color' rather than 'collar'. I also thought that it was a bit odd. Mai would fight him off but just give in again after putting up so much of a fuss? I think you should make it clearer that maybe she really did want to stay but was only doing what she thought was right? |
| justicar347 2007-12-25 ch 1, | abuseI thought this was amusing. I congradulate Zuko on his success and perserverance. There is nothing worse than getting that close and then getting shot down. Most guys would have ended up "consoling" themselves in that situation, but he managed to turn it into a victory. |
| xxBloody-Lovexx 2007-12-25 ch 1, | abuse-innocent look- Me?~ ...That was convincing enough, though I don't know where the first draft of Advice went, so how about something else? |