I'm not usually a fan of the sad fics, but your writing is lovely, very lyrical.

WOW!


That's just 'WOW'...it's a good 'WOW'.

INK! *clears throat* I mean, hi.

"...the Sisters bearing down on a row of girls and telling them that fear was the heart of love - that day Allison vowed never to go back..." Hmm...that looks awfully familiar. Let me think...Death Cab for Cutie - I Will Follow You Into The Dark. And the line would be, "And Catholic school, as vicious as Roman rule, I got my knuckles bruised by a lady in black. I held my tongue as she told me, 'Son, fear is the heart of love,' so I never went back." Well, I get points for picking out THAT, at least. I think.

You still have a way with words. This is particular caught my eye - "...far beyond the places where neon lights vie for glory, like a conglomerate of ten million lesser gods..." Otherworldly. Beautiful.

Kudos.