This was a very, very good idea. Just like the original Screwtape letters, it causes a reader to think and examine themselves in uncomfortable detail. Kudos to you!

Hi Val, it's Kristi. Well, your story caught my eye last night and I broke my long abstinence from reading Narnian fanfics, especially those by people I know (I think I fear that once I start, they'll /all/ want me to read /all/ their works...and I have rather a lot of Narnia fanfic-writing, /prolific/ friends...) when I saw your synopsis. I was expecting a good laugh, with Wormwood egging the girl on to simply write horrible prose...and was surprised and pleased to find this insightful, even convicting work. Very, very well done, Val.

Fun!
Quite fun.
As I've been writing a report on Screwtape, coming in here to look at your twist was just irresistable...

Excellent! Screwtape rides again...and how right he is to point out to Wormwood the general view of people now ("everything is relative"). And the postscript - perfect. By the way - how did Wormwood mange to escape being eaten (even if he did end up in a House of Correction)?
Cheers, Paula

Why haven't you written more? *river of tears*

Sincerely,
Aravis Silvertree

This is fabulous and I commend you for trying to emulate Lewis' writing style and doing a good job of it. My only small complaint is that they ate Wormwood at the end of TSL. I not iced the mention of the corrections department in this chapter and I hope you are going to put bits of how he escaped being eaten in future letters. This is really good. I almost never read WIP's but I am putting this on alert and look forward to your perspective.

Simply terrific. Having read 'Screwtape Letters', I particularly enjoyed this. The ending post-script was simply too funny, and a great way to end. The comments about 'another-point-of-view' seemed poignant, and you managed to keep this lighthearted while really serious.

Like...'Screwtape Letters'! Great job.

This story so far is one of the few best Mary Sue parody I have ever came across, the other MS parodies I read either bashes the Sue or help us with 'How to Guide of Turning your Mary Sue into a Convincing Character'(Not bashing those, since I read and enjoy them. It is accidental if I sound like I am bashing them), but these deal with the heart of the matter and how one's soul - And the Suethor's - will be affected.

This is great.
I recall I was excited to visit the C.S. Lewis board to see all the Christian work that must be published. HA! I was horrified and hardly even visit the board now.
And what a great place to publish it! Right smack in the middle of the pool of disgust! Even if they don't listen, we Christians are responsible with telling the world the truth. So good job!
Also, you kept Screwtape in perfect character and voice.

Quite frankly, I'm thrilled by your Respect for Language and the delightful way you manage to twist your mind 'round to a believable perspective--you're no Lewis, obviously, but the imitation is a good one. I salute your efforts.

Bravo.
I loved the fact that he credited Babel to the work of his own side--that was a very nice touch.

Very creative, please continue

Masterfully done! Pertinent to all of us here and yet very much in Lewis's style.

This is very clever and keeps the tone of the original perfectly! The last postscript was a surprise at first since I had forgotten that bit of the original book but was a wildly funny way to end this. One suggestion, Screwtape says: "...as 'another point-of-view',(if she gave it any thought at all), not the hard Truth, and wave it away as such."
"The hard Truth?" Would Screwtape call it that? The statement seems rather out of character. His truth is not our truth, right?
Please write more!

Wow, Val, you are very good at running with the style in the Screwtape Letters. I am still amazed. Thank you for posting this chapter - it is a fitting addition. Each chapter has been well thought out and well written. I hope your exams go well for you!