Very good :) I could see this.

Wow. Really, just wow. This little thing is like a punch in the gut, but in the best possible way. Heartbreaking. It captures the moment perfectly. I wish I'd found it sooner, although I'm glad I came across it at all.

Thanks for writing it! Hope you don't mind if I favorite it.

Ohh I like it tons!
Anything written nicely about PotC is good for me!
Great work.

Lovely piece, mate. I can just imagine Barb saying 'Be it so? And which part is for the naive and daft?' You kept him in character very well!

Very nice I thought you captured Barbossa well, he is my favorite character. Anyway I would have liked to see a mention of Bootstrap but w/e. Good luck!

I'd never thought about how this might've happened before. This was all perfectly in character! Very good.

Nicely written! Great story!

OH MY GOD.
This was fantastic! :D
You know, I'm so glad that someone entering the contest had the last line so that it made me laugh. I enjoy all the angst, sure, but this one really cheered me up.
(Plus, it's Pirates! Captain Jack and Barbossa - you can't go wrong!)

Both were in character - even Pintel was, hell xD - and I just ... can't find anything wrong. Well done. :]

Good luck with the contest! :D

Very nicely done, I don't know the fandom well, but I enjoyed the way you wrote this piece. You have a nice lyrical style and the use of the prescribed ending line was genius.

A fandom I know!

Well, that truly made me smile, an excellent story. I can really hear Jack say in his lilting voice the last line.

The way you write the pirates speak is also admirable. An enjoyable story :D

~Nadia

Brunette-

Yeah- a PotC fic! I’ve often wondered how the mutiny went down.
Man oh man, have you ever got Barbosa down pat.
I can hear Barbosa saying these lines:

"We prefer to think of it as...innovative enterprising."

“"Do you tread on me honor? So I said, share and share alike. And look here. You shared the coordinates of the Isla de Muerta, and I share my pistol with you."

“"I pray you ain't overlooked my mercy, Jack. We found ye your own little personal island, so you can kill yourself on dry land!" Barbossa looked at him again. "So you oughtn't speak ill of me to the Devil."

I chuckled at this one:
"The worst 'a hell is for betrayers--"
because you and I were thinking alike.

Great job, Brunette.

Ah, very nice. I didn't expect it to end the way it did, but I'm not the biggest Pirate fan. I did, however, love your use of the last line.

Good luck with the FPWC.

Wow. Amazing (just like always). :):) I really love the dialouge between the two of them, it's so perfect. You really have them down to a tee. :):) "So you oughtn't speak ill of me to the Devil." I really love this line. You have quite the way with words. :):) So, great story, and I really loved it.

~Jordyn~

Nice usage of the ending line. And you have a really good vocabulary and the dailogue is in character.

Agreed. I found the dialogue very enjoyable. Good luck in the challenge.