This chapter is just so amazing! This chapter is so vivid! I love the description It's nice to get some questions off our heads why KadoXJade didn't happen. You're such an awesome writer! Also, "What have you done?" song is so awesome and fits very well to the chapter. Well, keep on writing!

First Off: I am sadly not a new reader, but I'm an old reader, if you can remember Suethe lol (I like my new name, but reminding people that I have, in fact, read the story before can get a little old after a while ;-;)

It's knowing why people do what they did that just sorta shoves me to their level. And then when I get back to a different character's level, I have to keep looking back at the other, and wondering what goes on in their mind at that moment.

Brilliant, satisfying, and leaves me wanting more. Oh, the evil of oxymorons.

“Eleven-thirty,” Ryuichi finally remarked, eyes wide with gloating hope.

“Fine,” John said, “Now go take it for a spin.”

Ryuichi smiled, standing up and taking out his brand new car keys, “Want to come along?”

They snickered, parents sharing secretive information through their minds, “No, we already rode it home, didn’t we?”

Secret code for, “We already took it for a joyride.”

Kenny ignored his parents’ secret smiles and practically skipped over the door’s threshold, bounding after Ryuichi.

^ Love that

It's an insight into what parents really are like xD this chapter was good, all the brother teasing back and forth the slight scolding, Kenny's thoughts, amazingly written. I love it, I really do. I missed reading your style =/ lol

short or unshort I still love it. I regret not reading this sooner, awesome chapter I can see the gap forming between the two brother's way of thinking and the idea Kenny has that becomes action. Love the cheesy lines! it works. I really like the planning of the time inbetween the scenes, from the talk in the room to being in Jade's room to her hand hitting the snooze button. I saw it in movie format with movie scores in the background. Great job ^-^

I like how Kenny thinks about Jade like that... even though it was kind of stalker-ish. It was a great chapter and I can't wait to read the next one! ^_^

WOW! I didn't see that coming, but it was great, especially when Jade wakes up!! I can't wait until next chapter to see what happens next! Okey Dokey then, see ya!! :D

HI!! Sorry I haven't reviewed in a long time my computer died on me a long time ago, then when it was fixed I had to look for your fanfic account. Took a while, but I did it! But then every time I tried to review it wouldn't let me, but that's over now and I can review everything!! So far the story is GREAT and I am about to read ch. 9, I know I wont be dissapointed!! ^_^

Not your best, but like all writers we have slumps. I know you'll pull some seriously good stuff out of your butt in the coming chapters. So keep it up :)

Awesome... Please keep writing!

Jesus woman, you're writing is getting more and more increadible with every passing moment. Keep up the good work :)

speechless. Oh woow, WOW OMS I LOVE THIS CHAPTER! THE DICTION THE FLOW THE IMAGERY THE TRAGEDY THE STORY THE DIALOGUE THE BETRAYAL THE CURSE THE IMAGERY EVERYTHING IT'S SO BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN I COULD SEE EACH AND EVERY DETAIL HERE EACH AND EVERY LITTLE SOUND EFFECT THE SOUNDTRACK WAS MY OWN THAT'S HOW GOOD THIS WAS I WAS ABLE TO PUT MY OWN THOUGHT UP SCORE TO THE WHOLE THING. IT'S SO TRAGIC WHAT HAPPENS TO EREBUS BUT IT TIES IN WITH WHAT WAS HAPPENING WITH JADE YOU EVEN ADDED THE WHEN HE WAS HURT AND NOT ENTIRELY CONTROLLED BY THE CURSE THE GODDESSES OH WOW THE SONG YOU CAME UP WITH THE IMAGERY YES I KNOW I SAID IMAGERY ABOUT 4 TIMES NOW BUT IT WAS AMAZING I THOUGHT I WAS GOING TO CRY BECAUSE I COULD SEE ALL OF THE PAIN ON EACH CHARACTER'S FACE EVEN IF THEY WERE BARELY MENTIONED BEAUTIFUL CHAPTER EVERYONE WHO READS THE REVIEWS READ THIS STORY!

-KAIRI IRL

wow, i regret not reading this earlier. The description in the first half was so, so vivid. I could hear the rocks sliding under his grasp- feel the foot lose it's footing and then find it again. I love the comical part with Impa when she saves him it really lightened the load of all the pain and despair in this chapter- regardless though this chapter hasn't really progressed that far into Erebus' story's ending it still held that rich imagery that only you i know are capable of. great chapter once again very little dialogue but the dialogue that was there was just enough i love the ending.

Ganon is how you spell his name xD

-kairi irl

Yay an update! sorry i havent stuck around, but i really dont have much time for anything these days. It sucks lol. Anyways i loved it, and am glad its getting deeper into the story.

Take Care,

True Blue

wow, that was interesting poor Erebus, i really like all the description, and how you show the cousin relationship between Impa and Erebus while still keeping this chapter overall serious and to the point. love love love...sorry tired, i'd write more i would,but i can't think right now i await the next chapter! ^-^

“I’m late, I’m late,” he muttered, franticly scurrying around his room, checking under his bed, throwing piles of clothes out of the way.

“Talk about Alice in Wonderland, dude,” Ryuichi scratched his chin, bored, “Tea party?” - LMAO, that was pwning XD


Man I really need to pay attention to your account more often XD Glad to see this thing is up and running. Your writing has improved dramatically from Seeing Truth, and it flows so much better as well.

Lookin' forward to the update :D