awthat was sdad hirari.

y she nono be lovey-dovey with demetree?

no lol her eyether

y hirari?

y?

no lol frum skimmimg hirari.

y?

exietment lol

lol

Good

fantastic use of metaphors and stuff...youre great w/ words! the only thing is that alexa sounds a bit childish, but she's supposed to be like fourteen.

i like he ending is quaint.

i really like your story. hope you can add more chapters as soon as you can.

-GaeaApril07

Aw...cute! You had very good voice in this chapter.

Wow. Your writing is beautiful.

Although, you maybe need to do a quick spell check.

Other than that, though, it's great!

So, what happens next! :)

LONDON? Now THAT'S unexpected, yet strangely intriguing... PLEASE FINISH IT! I am so glad to find another who has read the wonderful books of Elyon! I nearly went insane when I saw it on here! *big puppy eyes* Pwease finish? Pwease? I BEG YOU! PLEASE FINISH!

Reverend Lady Sasha the Perplexed of Longer Interval (a.k.a. Countess Sasha the Weird)

I love it! Just one question, is she in the modern day London? I can't wait for more!

Wow, I liked it! I think you have excellent word choice!

I loved it! And I'm so happy I'm not the only person writing in this category now, I was so sad that I was the only one who had posted anything for Elyon. I can't wait for I.