 Ocytavia 12/28/07 . chapter 1So, is Yumi goning to stay at Kadic, or is she going to move to Japan with her family?
It's a pretty good story, but why was Yumi crying?
I know I say this a lot to people, but your kinda rushing into the story. Try to slow down a bit, and help the reader understand the storyline better.
But, other than that, it's excellent. Keep writing.
Cya Later
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