 TheHeartPathos 6/13/09 . chapter 17whoo a sequel! :O |
 MSF94 6/13/09 . chapter 17so Congratulations you finished! it was good now on to the sequel! |
 TheHeartEthos 6/12/09 . chapter 17 Ok...I'm so lame I forgot my password.
Awesome chapter, I liked how it ended and the feeling it gave. P Can't wait to see where it leads in sequel -floats off to read sequel- |
 MSF94 6/9/09 . chapter 7Well tell me when you want it and your gw username and i'll give the stuff to you. |
 MSF94 6/9/09 . chapter 16Yeah another god chapter and a fast one mind I don't play guildwars anymore I still like it D if you need anything of my items or money on GW ask me I dont really need it. |
 MSF94 6/7/09 . chapter 15Finally a god damn update and it was actually very good D
Keep going |
 MSF94 5/10/09 . chapter 2Ugh... Fan wont let me comment on more that 1 chapter boo... Anyways could I say I bought 3 armor sets for my Necromancer and Ones for MM, SS and 55. Anyways could you please give em your email or IGN since I'm going to run out reviewing on your chapters soon. I could probably prove I'm no pedophile too. |
 TheHeartEthos 5/10/09 . chapter 14Wow, talk about intense. Can't wait for next chapter . |
 MSF94 5/10/09 . chapter 14You have not updated in a while I'm guessing your character is a Kurzick lol... Mind I do agree that the Kurzick Luxon side is dumb... I really should find a way to contact you other than reviewing your story and... I finaly made a Necromancer and I was a total fail at it D lol that it for now. |
 Tallera257 5/7/09 . chapter 13 Oh, almost forgot! My in-game main char is Karina Songbow, so look me up! Love to play with you if/when you have time!) |
 Tallera257 5/7/09 . chapter 13 ACK! Please update again soon, that's a horribly tense cliffhanger to leave the story on! D
At first I wasn't sure I would enjoy your tale, because the start was a little slow, but it picked up beautifully once Madi got to Shing Jea (and ever since that point). You sometimes have a tendency to write in run-on sentences, and your grammar is occasionally flawed (yes, I'm a grammar nazi, sorry!), but for once, that's not getting in the way of me enjoying a story! I think it's because you have a wonderful attention to detail, and your characters are all so unique. There's not one of them that isn't REAL AND HUMAN (read: somehow flawed), which makes much more interesting reading than if they're all Perfect Heroes.
The attention to detail is amazing. I remember in the chapter about Minister Cho's Estate, you actually described the noises Madi's summons made when they flexed their muscles...so many writers can write dialogue, or write visually, but so few pay attention to details of sound or smell! You've done both at different points, so that's very impressive.
Keep up the wonderful work, try using a grammar checker (or a beta reader), and please update soon so Orage and Madi can make up and get back to smooching. Oh, and Zefi is adorable! I want a Zefi for my own! ;D |
 TheHeartPathos 4/16/09 . chapter 13ah what's going to happen next
lookit me and zefi are the duos!
you should change your name to TheHeartLogos! do it (jkk) |
 TheHeartEthos 4/15/09 . chapter 13Hey, it's me yeah...uh...Z:7:2? Written like that I think, I don't recall.
D I got an account, like you said.
JUST so I can review YOUR stories and YOUR updates and have SIGNED reviews (not sure why last part is important) because YOU hardly sign on to tell me you posted -_
In any case, I feel as though I must begin my new life here as TheHeartEthos.
So here we go with the review XD
Yay! Good job I think.
I kind of wish you had put more into the Orage throwing her down part to inspire more emotion. It felt so much more powerful when you said it to me the other morning.
Stupid other girl, not that I'm saying she should die or anything.
It better be "TBC" and not "maybe I'll discontinue it from here" like you said the other morning! |
 MSF94 4/15/09 . chapter 13It's you again! and you updated! And it was great! BTW did you farm a lot this easter? I made about 300k! Anyways later for now! |
 IfThisDreamWasForever 4/14/09 . chapter 13 NO! stupid orage! D:!-goes in godzizi mode
RAWR
too bad he's not real otherwise i'd kick his butt xD
nice job, there were a few errors, but i think you did well -hugs
xD ok dinner time bye! |