Heh, that was great! The Ant Lion Man has always creeped me out... everyone sounded in character, which is what made it hilarious. I especially liked the technical explanation of the cheagles' fire breathing ability.

One little typo that I think occurred when processed the file- there's a line towards the middle where Luke (referring to Natalia) says "She's talking to it?" that's missing the space between "She's" and "talking". (It made for an amusing misread for me, though- I initially thought it said "She's stalking it?")

Okay, this was really pretty funny... Is it just me or did you make Tear a real bitch from the start til about three-quarters into the story? XD I love the part where the Ant Lion Man was glomping Tear and squealing about 'Ant Lion Man babies'!! That was just priceless! ^_^

Just a little thing that seemed off; Anise called Jade 'Jade' somewhere near the end. I think she'd called him 'Colonel' instead.

Yay! My first fanfic of the year.


Oh lol. Evil, evil Jade. I just knew that his evilness could reach new boundaries: Tear's patience, Guy's sanity, and Anise's well-being. XD Jade played them all.

Oh so evil, I loved it.


Thank you for sharing this with us, and Happy New Year.