Oh la la! this was really lovely. I adore how you wrote Itsuki.

Amazing. Why is it so hard to find good Itsuki fiction? Am I just not looking hard enough? Why can't I find more pieces with this sort of quality?

I loved this. Absolutely adored it. It's deep, insightful, looks into the true character rather than merely mentioning the reality while keeping the smile plastered on, and it gives you an idea of what sorts of things Itsuki must be thinking behind that well-practiced smile of his. It's not even all that Itsuki/Kyon, which (while I kind of like the couple) actually helps it, because it doesn't mess it up with too many romantic niceties. It's honest, it's there. It's not fluff. It's angst. (Sort of.)

Brilliance~

I absolutely LOVED the first scene.
The thought of constantly-smiling Itsuki burning incense is something so depressing, I can hardly picture it.
Nevertheless, that is why I loved it, and this is why I love YOU.

For some reason this seems very sad to me. (pout) It all just sounds so tragic and I'm not sure I like it very much because - while I love Evil!Itsuki - Angst!Itsuki doesn't seem quite as appealing ... O.o How odd ... it was very nice though, greatly written just like the others I've read. Very good, I say though the sad note to it makes me a bit droopy ...

It's true, we do need more yuri. I myself fail at yuri and I'm not entirely sure why ... it just seems to elude me. I can only hope to one day conquer it (just like I conquered everything else from yaoi to pregnancy sex, from threesomes to bondage and S&M!!) One day I'll PWN it. One day.

Nice simple look at a quiet moment for the brigade, though the beginning feels somewhat disconnected from the rest of the story.

On a grammar note, you use "facade" at one point as a verb. Perhaps you mean "fake"?

Your word choice and grammatical structure is excellent. I rather enjoyed that glimpse into the Koizumi's thoughts. A simple story centered on a simple scene. Very nicely conveyed.

poor Itsuke! He's my fave. character, cuz he's awesome XD