A wonderful story that tells Ranma and Nabiki's story in a new light. it's refreshing in a way to read it like that, and I can't pinpoint what exactly it is in your story that makes it so different to read. is it Nabiki's viewpoint? maybe Ranma's calm personality (though he's not OOC), regardless, it's really good.

However, sometimes you break the fourth wall, (speaking to the audience), that sometimes work, sometimes it doesn't (and I guess it also depends from reader to reader), but for me, in this story, it doesn't work. I'd rather have it without you telling me who my favourite mercenary girl is.

a second thing is Ranma's admitance over feeling like some manga person. Seeing as how he actually is that, I wouldn't advice you to describe himself like that. it's alluring, I know, but it kicks the reader back to the realisation he's reading a fiction, a fanfiction. and you want the such the reader in, making him think he's in another world.

then at the beginning you start as a film noir scene. a good idea, but I don't know. I'd kill that darling of yours there, and start differently. I still read on, and I enjoyed the rest thoroughly, but that's my advice.

But really, I liked it a lot, thanks for writing it.

very interesting. it's nice too see that there are still some original ideas out there. Hope to see something come of this

Interesting so far, I look forward to the next chapter =D

Definitely a story that pulls you in.

This is pretty interesting. It's refreshing to run across a story with characters that are so self-aware, but still horribly flawed. Good job. Kudos.

Interesting story there. I hope you keep working on it. I'd like to see more.

Grah!
Was looking for something to read amongst my bookmarks, and found this one. Now, why haven't you updated this one since in forever?
This has promise in my opinion.

On a side-note, I really like Kanao-chan. ^^

/ecchansama

fukuoka, is also in another island.

Ranma uses ore for I not boku

This is good. I'd like to see more of it.

this is one of the best stories i have read from ranma of this type greatly looking foward to reading further chapters

Dammit, how did ch5 escape my alerts? I thought I did this already!
Anyway, love the fic, love the mystery can't wait to see where things are going. And to tie up any loose ends--

[x] Add story to my Story Alert list

Facinating. A very unusual take on this topic. I'm so glad you're ignoring the saint!Nabiki fanon. Can't wait to see where this goes.

Yay fun fun. I think the explaination of what Ranma 1/2 is was a bit forced, but the rest of the conversation flowed well. This scene really is too serious for the tougne in cheeck forth wall bit to work well. I am however looking forward to more.

very nice... i like where it is going. will be following this story.