This was a good feel through story, but we all make inner mistakes, you should go over ur words and edit but all in all it was pretty good! so good job

Wow, this is good! And I probably understood it better despite the errors because I speak french too :). Tu deverais peut-être trouver quelqu'un qui parle anglais qui pourrait t'aider avec tes erreurs, même si y'en a pas gros :).

I remember that night...I was ** off!! This was great, you really hit the nail on the head. Please write another part to this, I want to see how you'd have Jeff get his revenge!

You did an awesome job!
Keep up the good work!

Great start keep going