please keep going this story
is great

Oh, I like it! You need to update.

The plots wonderful, I'm really excited to see what happens next! Gosh, i used to live in Harlem haha. Scary.

Only area for improvement I can point you to is that some of the speech seemed a little too 'written' and didn't flow as it would naturally. Other than that, a wonderful piece of writing; one I implore you to finish!

hi. i would justlike to ask you to please continue this story it is really good. thank you.

Aw this is interesting. I hope you update soon.

I really love you work, btw. :)

Sparkling Dolpin

It's weird cuz when they found the second body and the footprints by the door, I was thinking that the smaller footprints were made by someone who wasn't wearing any shoes. That's weird, I guess cuz when I was little I always went ouside without any shoes on.

I really like this, wanna see where you're going with this. This must be really tough to write considering the race issue and everything.

Oh you redid this, cool. I think this version is actually better than the original. You can now turn this into a chapter fic!

have you posted this story before? i've read it somewhere.. lol. sorry if i sound stupid.. i'm just wondering.. :/

Aw thats sad. Poor Emmlay T.T This will turn out to be pretty interesting,though it doesn't seem to be a one-shot. BTW, out of curiosity is this gonna be an E/O?

aw... is this going to be an EO story?
It's great story

Wow! Amazingly sad story, from Emmlay's point of view, but the good guys won as well. Very complex, layered, and potent. The use of the prompt line is perfect.

Added to my C2, "My favourite tales."

Good luck in the Challenge! :)

please update soon this story is so amazing i love it the end is so sad but its so good please update really really fast.