[sighs] I was feeling sorry for the poor guy before the story even began... Geez pitting the poor idiot against Hayate's knights... that's pure sadism XD
Haha I really enjoyed it, and I even thought that he Might survive through it and to the Ball with Hayate, I didn't expect Cooking of Mass Destruction to take action XD And yeah, who needs boys when she has four loving and incredibly loyal knights who absolutely adore her ^^
I'm glad this guy didn't try to invite Nanoha... I shudder at the thought of what Fate would do to him...

Not bad. Would probably have been better without the sociopolitical commentary at the beginning, since that was rather out-of-place and distracted from the story as a whole. Overall, though, not bad.

I'm quite sure Hayate had some none-too-kind words with the Wolkenritter after this. She's the boss.

This is really cute, he had really mistaken Shamal. Poor boy, posion by the most innocent. Heehee

I'm dieing of laughter here. Oh goodness, that was brilliant. Supreme characterization. I almost feel sorry for the poor sod. But Hayate deserves better.

AHAHAHAHA! Best Hayate fic EVER.

Tis was awesome, and exactly what would happen in canon.

Poor guy; I would have ran since Vita’s warning. I guess he was ready to make any sacrifice to get laid down with Hayate. I don’t think Hayate needs a date, she has her knights after all, if you know what I mean with that.

Nice work.

Great story. Short, funny, and probably accurate account of an outsider's view of Hayate and her knights.
The only thing that confused me was the quick jump from eating the cookie to the trip to the hospital. Some sort of line break, or a new paragraph, might help the flow.

I just had to read this since it isn't often to see an update from you. I loved this. There aren't many stories about the knights and this one was just perfect. I liked the sarcastic tone you used throughout the story. I really felt for the guy though. Too bad he ate Shamal's cookie.

Great job! One really wonders when Hayate will get a date.

Only one thing can be said about this piece of win:
Poor guy. XD

I love it! It was so funny! Signum is indeed very hot in a dangerous way.I loved the character design of the Wolkenritter and in your story, they are completely in character! I feel sorry for the dude, he should have known his place. Now... can you please do a NanohaxFate + Vivio fic?

Great story!

Mikey