 Electric Monk 1/31/02 . chapter 1Since yours is the only story not written by me in the Gibson section I'm surprised I hadn't reviewed this yet so here goes.
I liked the opening and the story was well done but I really like William Gibson so I'm going to nit-pick the background details.
Consoles are just consoles; not Jack consoles (nit-pick I know). Unless you're into archaic tech (and you seem to be in the story (speedboard) so it really isn't that big a deal) then the consoles hook up directly to the mind or, for a regular computer, voice command.
And while I like the book burning idea (shades of Fahrenheit 451) you might want to pick some evil corporation instead of the Government, which doesn't seem to care about the peons and is run by corporations anyway.
Oh yes, I also want to know more about Trace what do you mean by 'Rogue Artificial'? Hope you add another chapter soon. |