I have mixed feelings about this fic. Had it not been for the horrible ending, I would've already added it to my favorites. I liked your writing style and the characterization. You portrayed Squall's bitterness and Laguna's guilt very well. I loved Squall's journey through Winhill, when he was looking for some traces of Raine. I could totally see it happen; the conversation with the flower lady made me feel all fuzzy inside. I also loved Laguna's mature side. He didn't give in to his son's accusations, he didn't fight back – he just accepted the whole situation as the consequence of his actions. Or so it seemed to me.

Nevertheless, the ending is a completely different story. To put it in plain terms: it sucked a lot. It was overdone, sickeningly sweet (and I usually /like/ sweet stories, mind you), not to mention completely forced and implausible. I just can't stand deus et machina solutions. Couldn't they just make peace (or not) without the woman's ghost? Besides... Squall on his knees, sobbing and calling out for his 'mama'? How OOC is that...?

I know you wanted to make it very emotional, but you overdid it. Well, I thought I'd get that off my chest, even though I still liked this story very much. :) Many thanks for sharing!

another nicely done laguna and squall fanfic, i must admit. brought tears to my eyes.

*sniff sniff* I loved it! :)

You are an excellent writer and I have very much enjoyed reading your work! Keep it coming! :)

Sorry! I couldnt help reading this again (mostly because I enjoyed reading it in the first place, secondly because I have been addicted to your site :D it's a good addiction, though!)
Okie, so after rereading, there are some things that I noted...
" on permanent loan from Esthar as something of [a] gratitude "
~"a gratitude" i dunno, supposedly microsoft word says it's an odd pairing (they arent always correct though!)
~there's a slight detail mishap, i think. when laguna appears, they're in elle's old house, right? there's no bar (apparent) downstairs in there... supposedly
~also, when Squall's taking a look at the photos, you've written that it's the first time he's seen his mother... but then again, you mention the 'dream world' where Laguna's seen a lot of stuff... so, yeah.. doesnt the dream world count? or at least when he visited Winhill (haha stampeding into the lady's home) and saw Raine's ghost... count?
anyway, i still adore your fanfics :D especially the ones you've put onto your site!!

.Wow. This really had me in awe, reading up until the end (or when my eyes got too teary to see my screen clearly enough). You provide a great sense of detail without overdoing it, and the switches from vocal to mental voicings is great. This portrayal is incredibly well done and an excellent read.

Enchanting. Simply complex, with a mixture of emotion... : WOW. With the added bonus of no major spelling errors!! Excellent!! The variety of words, and expressions... :D:D! Only thing I thought was sort of out of place, this is just my opinion, but I can't picture Squall saying 'Mama'... hahah sorry. Wonderful fanfic!

Aww, that was soo cute! But where's "Storm Front!?" I reallly hope you can upload it again and keep posting, because it was so awesome I can't even describe it! I hope it wasn't permanently deleted...that'd be horrible! Anyways, let me know and cute fic!

Wonderful! I'm a sucker for Squall/Laguna fic, and this one is so well done. I wrote something along similar lines, but it's not nearly as good.

Aye, that was a poignant story. Incredibly beautiful and touching. It left me with a tear, and that means alot as its the very first time thats happened to me!

I very much like the way you made Raine bring Father and Son together, and made them forget their anger, and just embrace each other for what they were. The story brought a new angle to the whole Laguna/Squall mystery; almost with a gentleness that I'm sure that no other would be able to create.

Simply masterful.

Awww...:) Wonderful work.

;_; awww, thats so sweet *cries* u need to do a sequal about Squall kid (^_^;;)

oh my gosh, that was so sad...but very good! but so sad...but still very good! it made me go awwwwwwwwwwwwww in like 20 different places. i enjoyed the writing style and how everything came together. seeing squall break down like that was also pretty cool because he hardly ever does, maybe once every time a pig flies. well done i enjoyed it very much. one thing though, i was very surprised there was no mention of rinoa at all through-out the fic. but still good job.

Absolutely wonderful! I started to cry when Squall said, "Mama." I fall hard for these types of stories. Loved it!

That story was awesome! Well written, *sniff* and very touching. I hope to see more of your storys! ^_^

;_; Ohhh...dammit! *tears spill from her eyes* Absolutely moving...poignant...and damn, I was/am truly astounded by this...whole-heartedly enjoyed it...*-*...really, I'm all teary-eyed! *chuckles* It was a lovely story, and you certainly have an amazing writing gift...so never let that 'pen' of yours get dry! ^-^

Zhai'helleva Arafel! n.n

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