How Amestris...(typical)

I really like this! Nice to see Alfons alive and well. Mustang is so mean him tho! I understand a bit but yeesh!

Hello! It's hand-made-city from devart! Just finished reading up to this point and I love this story! I've also picked out a scene that I might draw for your request, but I haven't read your other story yet, so I don't know if it will be my final choice. Who knows, maybe I'll do more than one drawing for you! I love to draw, after all! Also adding this story to my alert list!

Interesting possibility you opened up here. The story linei s also intersting. I like Heiderich, he shares some personality traits with Al but he is dstinctly his own person. Misery hs also piqued my interest. It looks like a lot of ocnflict should be coming from her end. Selim seems to be acting a bit oddly to me. I only saw bits and pieces of the ending. I'm curious to see what is up with him. Please do continue this story, it has really caught my interest.

I'm so glad that Roy returned to his previous position! Movie Roy was way too emo :(

I guess you can call me the local grammar freak. I don't think anyone else noticed (you certainly didn't, which means something) but I notice really tiny things. So for future reference:

~ “So, I suppose “Hello, my name is Alfonse Heiderich” wouldn’t be the right response to this, now would it?” I answered defensively.

When putting quotes inside dialogue, you'd use the apostrophe, like so:

“So, I suppose ‘Hello, my name is Alfonse Heiderich’ wouldn’t be the right response to this, now would it?” I answered defensively.

~ “There’s no sense in questioning a little girl who’s /to/ scared to answer straight anyway.”

It's only a small mistake, but the right word would be 'too'. 'Too' is an adverb. 'To' is...you know.

~ Err, Roy Mustang is a colonel. Not a colonial (I'm not quite sure what a colonial is.) But hey, you got the first part right. Oh, hey, look! Here's the basic definition(s) for 'colonial' if you wanted to know--

colonial [/kuh/-LOH-nee-/uhl/]

-adjective

1. of, concerning, or pertaining to a colony or colonies: /the colonial policies of France./

-noun

6. an inhabitant of a colony.

~ Homonyms really don't seem to be your forte. 'You're' is short for 'you are', 'your' is the possessive form of you. 'Cheep' is the sound the chicks make, 'cheap' is inexpensive.

-@-@-@-@-@-

For the actual chapter, it was really good. I like how Roy called him a clone, and he started to second-guess himself. Is it going to be RosexHei? (I'm not very good at putting my feelings into words, sorry.)

~C.B.

If the 'misery' thing you're talking about is a rumor about the FMA creater making another deadly sin, i dont know. But there isn't an eight deadly sin. The seven deadly sins come from the bible.

I wonder what's happening to Edward and Alphonse on the other side of the gate while Alfonse is being forced to make more rockets again.

the "clones" thing gets me upset whenever I hear it. I guess that's because Alfons is the main character. If Ed was the main character and was being told that he was just a clone, then I'd feel the same way. Of course, Ed would probably punch out the guy, satisfying my urge. ^_^"
Hmm... I'm not sure about Mustang's plans. I mean, if it's him deciding to get Alfons to help make rockets, I'd wonder if it was for Ed or to help with the plan to get to Fuhrer... But, if it's the government with the plans and Mustang's just enforcing them, it might make more sense... I guess if it's important, I'll see the reasons later.
I thought I should mention that, I've recently found out that, at least by train, Central and Resembool are over three days apart. Cars might be faster... I'm not sure, though, since Ed's favorite way to travel seemed to be trains... (sighs) I'm too caught up in trying to figure out stuff about things that don't even exist.
Well, I'm hoping this'll end up with Ed and Al coming back to this world. Mainly because I'm curious about what's going on with them, now.

Lol, you've been reading the manga. ^^ If you have turned Selim into Pride that would explain why he's still alive, but not why his adoptive mother isn't looking after him (unless he killed her) and what he could possibly hope to achieve n a remote place such as Risembool. Unless he starts spying on Alfons, perhaps... Not meant as criticism ^^; just trying to find the logic behind it.

Very enjoyable to see the gapes of the movie filled in. You've got to appreciate Ed's reaction to Haushofer. XD
Very interesting and tragic historical notes at the end. ^^

It was a given he'd run into Winry. Still, I hope he can be good for her.
An eight Sin that ran away from Dante, ey? Does she even know she's a Homunculus? We'll find out I guess.
Oh, just thought I'd point out: you're making a repeating eroor in spelling 'whether' like 'weather'.

Very good first chapter. You *really* did your homework on this, didn't you? Wth the books, dates and German and Roma thrown in. Gives it that extra touch.

The line that ironically stayed with me most (beside the "a life for a life" ;) ): “By dragging it into another war when we’re barely recovering from the last one? Is that how you want everyone to think of Germany, that we’re stupid enough to make the same mistake twice?”
Painful, as we know they did make the same mistake twice, though with circustances... Well lets not go into any of that.

I like how Rose mentioned the sun. It sounded like something she would mention. ^_^
Izumi-lookalike could be described a little better. I mean, the braids, I didn't really notice being Izumi-like until I looked at the note. It'd be nice if she was a lot like Izumi and was described as strong or something, and yelled a lot.
Hmm... the telekinesis thing, I guess would make sense, but it just sounds too much like the movie you took it from, to me. ^_^" Hmm... I'd say she'd be less able to controll the ability, like Wrath. She hasn't had any red stones, right?
Aw... you ended it when Mustang came! (Hmm... I'm beginning to wonder where Mustang is on my favorite character list. He Is a very unique man...)

A wreath of flowers! ^_^ I thought that was coming.
Eh? Homunculi have very cold hands?
Hmm... I didn't find much to comment on, did I? I wish I knew what Ed and Al are doing, now.