sorry i left off the face of the planet. I love your story as you know. I just got around to reading the rest. Amazing. its a shame you didnt get more reviews. not many people are interested in reading dark fanfiction. Its sad there isnt more.

Awesome story!!

Wonderful. I think it would be good if you did an afterlife sorta thing. Snape there, his surprise at Valerie being there,etc. That would be awesome.

Thank You!
The epilogue was beautiful. I confess even I; cold, heartless cow that I am, had a tear in my eye!
A fitting, if sad, ending and a brilliant piece of work on the whole.

The epilogue ended quite well. It actually gave me a sense of a triumphant warm ending. As a whole , one thing that actually drew me to this story was the depth of the character development. You actually managed to create a character that seemed to be quite lifelike. However, I still think that your view of Snape is quite cynical in a way though . Also your writing was quite smooth and quite engaging - unlike some other that feels very very jerky to the point that you can see plot holes shining through it. I think you managed to pace it well IMO , but I'm saying this with the opinion that Valerie and Snape has been implied to be drawing closer in the time leading up to the Story's end.

By the way , why did the Sorting hat Placed Valerie in Gryfindor?It seems that it's not so much courage she possesses, but loyalty. And of course, a fascination for the Dark Arts , and a very twisted sense of Masochism distorting her other wise noble nature.

I didn't feel the same degree of angst or emotion here for some reason actually. I also think you really wasted a potentially interesting character and a potential sequel really. Then again...

a sad, but meaningful ending. I'm sure that, had I gone through what Valerie had, suicide would probably feel like the only way out. After all, what is left for her now the man who was her only light in life is gone?
I wonder what the Epilogue will bring?

This is an excellent piece of work! It is really darker and more angsty in many ways then the original , and quite engaging.

I was actually wondering whether you have any plans for Valerie after the death of Voldermort. It seems to me that all signs are pointing to her as an anti-Voldermort of sorts , a Dark lady torn between her darker side and that of light.

Based on this story, I seem to envison and imagine a future Valerie, a character who straddles the borders of the dark , and torn between her Masochistic/ Evil / Ends justify means side , and her moral side with that capacity of love.

Perhaps , unlike Voldermort , who is very much a nihilist, she takes a slightly opposite stance. Her experiences ( Such as the abuse of her muggle Mother at the hands of the Wizard Father) not to mention her inclinations ( the Paternalistic like protection )imbue her with the belief that magic , should one day be wielded by all humanity, ( In opposition to Voldermort's Anti Muggleism ) . That could be her guiding purpose in life, one of her anchors to not fall off the moral event horizon .

She might advocate and pursue a merger of magic and technology , or perhaps pursue her vision of magic for all humanity- perhaps through a fusion of muggle bio-technology and wizardry. Like Voldermort , she would go to almost any length to achieve that goal , but unlike Voldermort, there are limits and principals which she will not cross, though her usage of the Dark Arts often creates the potential for corruption. She balances between Light and Darkness, pursuing an aim .

Keep it up! This story by far is far above the quality of the average FF story. =) And I think it would be a waste to kill Valerie at the end of it really .

Another brilliant chapter. Naughty you for dangling the juicy carrot of hope over our starcrossed lovers though! ;)

On another note, i wondered if you had read my stories also? I am unhappy with my earlier chapters and am looking into re-editing them, and i would appreciate your input, as i do with every reader, but especially as I enjoy your writing so much!

Oh no! I sense the end is near. :(
I love this story and i'll be so sad whan its over. Especially as you hinted at a not-very-happy ending.
Regardless, i am with you, severus and valerie till the end!!

OMG i love this one i can't beleive someone eals can see the Sev i see. i would love to go ice skating with Sev along with some other stuff but lets cencor that...>.< lol couldn't help the odd face but i am smileing \_/
way to widely.

wow... why am i still reading this...oh i know now never mind

let me just say< with cencor, what the F%^& was that S%^%. it was good but just a little scary to see snape do it...

Hmm...interesting. I like your story so far, but I'm not the type of person who enjoy OC's really.
Sorry about that, but that's just my pet peeve: OC's.
I can see this isn't a bad story. The problem is I think, why you haven't got as many reviews is probably the fact you have used an OC.
I'm not sure if you would want to do this, but substitute your OC with another character from the HP world maybe...?
It'll probably be a lot more popular...

I mean, that's just my opinion.
Personally, I think the writings pretty good, and the only reason I think that it isn't quite so popular is what I mentioned above.
Keep on writing, don't let the lack of reviews get you down!
Remember that writing for yourself is one of the main reasons for story writing.

~Tian

yeah, I am from AFF. Thanks for remembering me! ;)
I was glad to find you on here as I wanted to keep on track with your updates and unfortunately AFF doesn't do alerts.
I really like this story, actually I am really fond of all your works. I have read most of your in progress and the completed 'pureblood coup'. which I enjoyed immensely. I am preparing myself for the sad ending to come,but this story has me gripped with all the subterfuge!!
As for 'In the dungeon' I tried to do a dark fic but failed ;(
I cant do it to my characters, they are my babies! I'm at a difficult place with that one right now, so its on a temporary Hiatus while I work out the kinks in the current chap, but I welcome you reading my work and look forward to hearing any comments you may have on any of my stories!

Perhaps I'll be able to do a better job of dark writing with my next fic in the wings... its working title is 'Stockholm Syndrome' so keep your eyes uot! perhaps you could give me a few tips. I love how deliciously Dark your works are! XX