I like it. I especially like the last thing Roy says. It's like he's telling her thanks for waiting and that she is still the only one that he trusts to watch his back.


Very nice story!

I liked it well enough. Your grammar and spelling are a little off in some parts, but that can be fixed easily.

There's something a little awkward about the way this is written, but we all have those days.

I think you could've expanded a little more as well- give us more of a sense of how Riza feels, or how terrible the situation is. Pick something and focus on it.

That's my advice to you. That, and keep on writing. Practice makes perfect!

cute!
but riza's name isn;t generally hyphenated...
it's spelled Hawkeye.
and you had a couple of typos, like not capitalizing "central" once.
but it was still really sweet.

Yay! That's all I have to say. Yay. Great writing!

~Pickles