sorry to say this but,

1.too short, I should has been a one shot.
2.I did like the story though.

omfgod no yoh dont do it

OMFG! BRILLIANT STORY SO FAR!1 I think it is cool that Yoh is slowly following Hao's spirit and influence. Cant wait till nxt chap. Update soon x

Ok dumb FF wouldn't let me review for the fourth chapter again...Anyway, this is in reply to your question. First off, is Hao dead in your story? If he is, I would say something along those lines. But if he is alive,(me liking the good boy gone bad stories) maybe play with the way Yoh thinks of everyone? Alter his perception or something? Anyways, it looked like you were looking for advice, if you have any other questions (without me sounding like I want to alter it) I am more than willing to answer. ^_^

I hope you update, it seems interesting.

Problem TOO SHORT

Can't wait for next chap.

Very good and interesting chapter. But can you please write little longer chapters? ;)

It´s short, but very interesting ;) Hurry up and update :)