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| WhyMustIWrite 2008-10-03 ch 1, | abuseCame across this today and enjoyed it so much! That was quite a take on "what if Obi Wan never completed his training?" The parenthesis thing was odd, but the more I read it, the more I liked it. By the end, I fell in love. Very unusual and added so much character. My favorite I think is "(master, but only in the best sense)" I also loved how the first half makes you think that Ben is so noble and good hearted. Then the second hits you with a cold slap. Beautiful! |
| skywalker05 2008-04-12 ch 1, | abuseExcellent. Your prolific use of parenthesis could be annoying in less skillful hands, but you use it very well. It seems as if the parenthesis'ed words are "the Force screaming at him". The references to the movies were haunting in comparison to the AU. |
| Guardian Dimension 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abuseWow. It's short - but it really is something unique, and well written. I liked it! Well done. :) |
| Darth KenObi-Wan 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. A bit freaky though. lol. Keep writing. D. Ken |