Reviews for Twist and Shout

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ninjamonkeyts3 2008-04-04 ch 28,	abuseare you going to write more of this? please do! i love the corny/maybelle and IQ. keep on writing!
Meredith and Derek 2008-02-16 ch 28,	abusehm Amber at the end kind of confuses me lol hurry back
Sandshrew777 2008-02-16 ch 28,	abuseAnother chapter with IQ as our narrator. Delightful choice. His apprehension about Corny's chat is smart. The choice to make him her escort gives us the perfect eye into Tracy's character, as well as the necessary "she's changing right over there!" kind of heart-stopping-ness. It makes you squee. The run-on sentence IQ gives us about her in the dress is pure ambrosia. Delightful. Tracy's handling of the commercial is in-step, and both Corny and Amber's reactions are in-character. I see this coming from Amber, but the lack of body language in that last scene between Amber and Tracy really let it down. I didn't know how Tracy was taking it, and I really wanted to. I think IQ wanted to, as well. Was it possible for him to see her? I know she couldn't see him. Anyway, the over-protectiveness of IQ was delightful and his voice as a narrator brings a whole level of nicety to this chapter. A success in nearly every way. Excellent work. Keep writing.
Sandshrew777 2008-02-16 ch 27,	abuseOoh. I never caught the whole "sister he never had" detail on the first read-through. Now this chapter goes up a notch in wonderfulness. I like the details about the pancakes and his willingness to have both her and himself eat. His slight distaste about his own first commercial is on-point. Tracy's constant denial of Link's affections also is simply delightful, even if she's upping the "just friends" stigma to "just siblings". Soon she'll have nowhere to go. :) His last line is simply delightful. A wonderful choice to make. I find nothing here that needs improvement. :) Superb work. Keep writing.
Sandshrew777 2008-02-16 ch 25,	abuseLou Ann is a bit of an odd character. I'm not sure why you felt the need to include her, but she adds a level of "Girls, wake the frick up!" that you decide to incorporate here instead of an introspective realization on their parts. Of course, that can come later, so maybe Lou Ann is the stimulus. In any event, she's a weird choice, but a fun one. We'll see what becomes of her. The pinky swear scene is nice, as is the bit with the Bad Girls. Detention works to give Penny the words she needs later, although I thought the Intro to Flirting 101 scene was a touch contrived. It was cute, but I couldn't quite see it realistically happening. I like the details, the descriptions, and all the narration. The dialogue is equally natural. Strong work. Keep writing!
Sandshrew777 2008-02-16 ch 26,	abuseThis narration all hits the spot. You explain everything, there are logical transitions, and Link's words are all working for me. I particularly think that Link's words about IQ are poignant. They work for his personality, and his pseudo-respect for Tracy's other main pursuer comes across here. I'm curious to see how he acts towards IQ when all is said and done. Link's inability to smile is a great character moment, and Tracy's choice makes perfect sense. A nice twist. Strong work! Keep writing.
tsudandi-hime 2008-02-15 ch 28,	abuseYay, a chapter! Sketch, I thought he'd be like that. But shame, I feel sorry for IQ and Amber is so real, so much depth to her: there's a reason why she's the way she is. Link must get a backbone and some balls and Tracy should realize that boys find her attractive. Love this story. And waiting for an update!
Tonko 2008-02-14 ch 28,	abuseThe internet ate my review!! T_T Anyway, I'll go again: IQ!
Old Fiat 2008-02-14 ch 24,	abuseAh poor Corny! Maybelle is sexy and that was hilarious. :D The adults are really my favourite characters in Hairspray and you've done a brilliant job writing them. :D Cheers, Old Fiat buy/drive fiat
Old Fiat 2008-02-14 ch 28,	abuseThat was great! I love the way you write Amber, she seems so vulnerable and frightened. :) Great show and can't wait for more! Cheers, Old Fiat buy/drive fiat
Nor of Kiamo Ko 2008-02-13 ch 28,	abuseOh, wow. I can't believe this, but, yay, Amber! :) And IQ is so, so sweet. I almost want HIM to get the girl a little bit. You are so awesome! Keep up the great work.
Phoenix Fanatic 2008-02-13 ch 28,	abuseI liked the glimpse pf Amber there at the end, good character development. Another excellent chapter!
Vesica 2008-02-13 ch 28,	abuseAww...Amber might not be a alien bitch queen after all. Maybe - I'm not sounding the all clear just yet. And the boys - oh the boys. eye roll Link's got the words and IQ's got the heart and neither of them has the balls to just ask her out. Of course, Tracy's non-comprehension of flirting isn't helping. You're steering them in a direction where the boys will either have to be very blunt or very crude for their message to penetrate that cloud of "but I'm just ME" surrounding our girl. And Corny is such a gentleman...when it suits his purpose. :D ~Ves
googoogrl007 2008-02-13 ch 28,	abuseAw what a cute chapter. I wish we had a Mr.Pinky's in real life. Great Job!
Elementalmoon 2008-02-12 ch 28,	abuseI may not like Amber, but she is a human being as she showed at the end of Hairspray. I really like that you're developing her as more than a blonde b**ch. Plus, things are more balanced and real this way! I love IQ he's great and you're doing a wonderful job! I hope that you update soon! Until then :D

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