Another great story! I especially liked how portrayed Raditz.

I'm not entirely sure what's wrong with me, but I found something oddly romantic about the last chapter. It was very sad and I'm incredibly intrigued by how you've managed to make the events in the stories lead up to this (Radditz talking to Vegeta about Nappa's "indiscretions") without actually giving away what was going to happen.

You've done a fantastic job in creating a universe where this seems completely plausible. I have to applaud you for making Vegeta look like a nice and semi-thoughtful guy, while at the same time staying so true to his character.

love it XD

This was a very good piece. I love stories about the life under the Cold Empire and the glimpses you gave of the non-combatants were especially interesting.

Interesting enough for a story all their own *cough* ;)

Nicely done!

There something very... telling, maybe... about this chapter.

i would like it if you write a story about how raditz meet appura and how he got her to trust him

i would like it if you write a story about how raditz meet appura and how he got her to trust him

Aww, this was a good story. Vegeta and Raditz were great. Nappa too.

Why didn't you do the final chapter from Vegeta's point of view?

I cant help but wonder at Vegetas thoughts during his first time having sex. A1

After all he's seen and done and experienced. I'm not 100% certain I dont feel cheated...

...Hnh. I'm not a newbie to the Vegeta universe, and I'm no stranger to the horror I feel was responsible for shaping the Prince into the evil man the Earth's Forces encountered. You have set an entirely new standard and I thank you for writing this story. Not many things bring a lump to my throat anymore, I thought I'd read it all but Vegeta's "first time" was just about the saddest thing I've ever read. I don't know who I pitied more in this chapter: Chiri or him. You kept Vegeta in complete character in a remarkable situation that I didn't think possible to write- And you did it perfectly. Thank you very much for this story. It's one of the best...

Congratulations!

This is the very first story I loved that had Vegeta as THE central character, rather than one of the more important players. It was really well-written. And I apologize if this isn't what you want in a review, b/c I'm patently hopeless when it comes to reviews/critiques. One thing I noticed is that while 3rd-person narrative is usually easier to write, this story might have benefited from the immediacy of a first-person narrator. Don't get me wrong: it still works (brilliantly, in my opinion), but it might have had an extra edge if it were first-person. Just my opinion, though.

You're to good to be writing fanfiction!

GREAT JOB!

One of the best fics I have seen. The story is so good that you can actually see it fit perfectly into the hole series.

Wow, I must admit I didn't quite expect this chapter to be a sexual encounter, but that isn't a bad thing. I was just surprised, but it was a good surprise.

This exchange was really very sterile, but I am sure that was the whole point. It is really quite sad that he was rendered someone who would view sex as something intended solely to get rid of a physiological urge. I am not quite certain if his quickness and seemingly little enjoyment had to do with the fact that he was really young or if it has an emotional reason, which would carry on throughout the rest of his life as a soldier.

What a pity that he wouldn't even give in to a kiss, to an urgency, not even thorougly to passion (lust, replace emotional availability with sheer lust), even as a young hormone struck teen.

I suppose this implies that in your chain of events, the one and only connection to a female he ever experienced was Bulma. There was absolutely no one else he would have felt that inclination towards, not even a little. Not even a got a tiny bit too close and got scorched incident. He basically lived it through Radditz.

You succeded in creating a believable series of events.

I want to say, Thank you for SACT. I really mean it. Your effort to do this and do it well means a lot to me and I really feel touched by it.

Thank you Kizmet.

*MorningBreeze6*

This is such a heartbreaking story in so many ways, but its also very engrossing. I'm fond of Chiri. Her and Vegeta's interaction says interesting things about both characters.

Whoot! Very good. This idea is way better than situations where Vegeta either had loads of women on purges or none at all. Perfect mix of anonymity (I don't think I spelled that right) and curious "sensitivity".

Epilogue? Does that mean there's no more to come? No! Mind you, I don't know what could come next so...