A great story. Very good.

GLADIATOR!! HELL YA!!
(I love that movie! It is just amazing!)

ah...so this was before he dies...(WHY MUST THIS HAPPEN TO HIM?? WHY?)

This is a lovely piece of fanfic (sure, it's telling me something I already know, but it's also giving more information! and it makes the scene all the more beautiful and sad)

I noticed you changed tenses in the brackets (some brackets have third person, others second/first/you-person)

YAY FOR THIS MOVIE!