 acantabloom 2008-01-08 . chapter 1This is quite wonderful! You write very well, both in general and in terms of characterizing Tezuka and Fuji. It's all suitably understated, and yet touching. I like the sticky note, and where it turned up in the end. However, I did feel like the progression from the second to last scene to the last scene was a bit sudden. It seemed like Fuji was upset, but got over it or came to some decision on his own. I know he can be spontaneous and unpredictable, but I guess I would have liked to see Tezuka come to a realization on his own, or take a more active role in that, or at least apologize to Fuji.
It was a very lovely ending, though. |