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New lord of darkness 2008-08-20 ch 1,	abuseI...dont really have anything to say except...wow!
YourGuardianAngel.xx 2008-06-11 ch 1,	abuseI'm close to tears This was beautiful, no other words can describe it.
CrazyKidDeath 2008-06-01 ch 1,	abuseace! very good representation on Shinji and Asuka
mikhail 2008-05-06 ch 1, anon.	abuseWah...! That was so sweet. Although Shinji was kind of out of character but it was really sweet. Uh... i give it a 8/10.
This is my name 2008-03-02 ch 1,	abuse"I hope everyone liked this. Hopefully you'll leave a review and let me know." ... I liked it.
SithKnight-Galen 2008-02-28 ch 1,	abuseI really enjoyed this piece. It felt very realistic as an epilogue and what could have happened really to the two of them a few years after the Third event. Thank you for showing them being a little less than the happily ever after, but still trying to reach that...together. It would be cool to see more to this at some point, maybe another one shot or something with Auska actually dealing with a shrink or something from Shinji's point of view.
zaisuro 2008-02-18 ch 1,	abuseIts Waffy But Not Cheesy, Not An Easy Feat For The Shinji And Asuka Pairing. Good Job! ^_^
Chrisarmando 2008-02-03 ch 1,	abuseI usually don't read ShinjixAsuka stories being a ShinjixRei fan, but I can usually enjoy ShinjixAsuka stories. Everything has a light and dark right? Anyway, more to the point I like how you went with the theme of still having problems in a post-3rd impact world. This story feels complete yet cut at the same time. Maybe some more chapters but I don't feel its necessary. As I read some of the other reviews it seems that some more dialogue will help, though your use of detail is very good. I enjoyed yhe story though there can be improvements. I know that the quality of your work is generally good so I'm not worried. In all honesty I liked this. Also as much as I hate to admit it, being OOC is something that can be unavoidable and should be expected in fanfiction. So no worries. Good luck with future works.
N13 2008-02-02 ch 1,	abuseAmazing! Your fic just tugged at my heart. I got teary a few times.
Nirvana Fox 2008-01-22 ch 1,	abuseA surprising way of a post-3Impact Shinji/Asuka fiction. I liked it. It was written very artisitically. Perhaps a little riske for a K rated fic, but very good nonetheless.
Lubeck07 2008-01-14 ch 1,	abuseScrew what everyone else says... This was a pretty good fic A little angsty for my taste but still good
Darknemo2000 2008-01-10 ch 1,	abusenot that great , I am afraid. First of all a noticeable lack of dialogue makes this fic look too ugly in terms of flow. Though I usually make comments vice versa where the lack of details and overdose of dialogue make a fic go too fast, yours took the other negative side. Too little dialogue. Second - time skips are never good for character development. Never. Ever. In your case its half-as bad since you used time skip for Asuka to be more broken but at the same time more ready to accept Shinji, who, once again is not Shinji at all, but some weird stranger who carries the name of Shinji. In other words a total OOC. And no your little time skip doesnt give enough of reason to make it believable that this change could have happened eventually. Third - you move too quick. Probably because you are not interested in this pairing to begin with. It feels artificial. But again OOC and the pathetic excuse of time-skip doesn't do any good either. All and all this is far from satisfactionary fic. But on the bright side - you really do know how to write detailed descriptions. This is some feature that most of fanfic writers sadly lack. Still, though I wont beat around the bush or hide behind the courtesy - this fic is average. And don't foll yourself with all those "ooh! More! Want more! So great!" comments. Though they might boost your ego they are hardly true - you still have long way to go.Hopeful your other fic will turn out better than this one.
Mr. Lee 2008-01-10 ch 1,	abuseHey there my old friend :). ROTFLMAO XD. There's nothing to be ashamed of. There are many fanfic autors that write great stories about charcters they hate, or characters that they like in a hateful manner. It's difficult, but it's not impossible. And you've proved it well with this Shinji/Asuka. As you already know, I'm not a big fan of the Red Devil myself. But I do read a Shinji/Asuka once in a blue moon. And this one, as with all your work, was excellently done, despite the lack of dialogue compared to your other works. It honestly was a little light on dialogue, and very heavier than usual on the detail. Nevertheless, it was still another great one hour one shot from the Shinji/Misato king :)! Who knows? Next thing you know, you'll be doing Shinji/Hikari, Shinji/Ritsuko and Shinji/Maya fics LOL XD! Well whatever you do, you know you have my support as always. Take care my Canadian friend. Later for now :)!
Rose1948 2008-01-09 ch 1,	abuseShort, insightful, and well thought out. I liked it.
Fanf1cFan 2008-01-09 ch 1,	abuseGlad you're back. I've usually liked your stories. This story is well written and the character interactions are believable. That said, the story seems a bit generic. There isn't much aside from references to the past that firmly places it in the EVA universe. Change the character names and references to the pre-story, and it would not be recognizable as a continuation of NGE. When they have finally gotten their act together, are they going to be generic civilians just like all the other 3I survivors? Or have I missed the point? Maybe this is not a fair criticism, since you may have intended it to be more of a character study incorporating their challenges and the changes they were going through. In any case don't let my review bring you down. I didn't want to discourage you.

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