I'm so glad you updated; It's hard to find good fanfics... Wonderful chapter as usual. I wanna see how Daichi is going to fit into this whole scheme. Keep it up hun!

Very interesting take on the whole Society of Light arc. I'm guessing the Raphael character in this story is from the original "Yu-Gi-Oh!", the fourth season with Dartz. Just a guess, I could be wrong. Oh, before I forget, I loved the whole "San da!" Manjoume scream at Judai. Definitely something I looked forward in the early chapters. Interesting way to spend a summer break--climbing to the bottom of elevator shafts and hiding skin bound books of evil. Gotta love it. (laughs) A very tender moment at the end of this chapter with Kenzan and Misawa. Oh, I must say you captured Shou beautifully. Long whiny dialogue and all. (laughs) Keep up the amazing work and I can't wait to see what happens next. P.S. Judai and Johan's meeting wasn't exactly as nice as it was in the anime. I wonder what's going on there?

I am SO sorry that I didn't review in like...a month. ^^; Never got time to get to it. Anyway, I'm impressed that it's still good. I noticed some errors but nothing important. XD

I wonder what Sho was talking about...and I wonder if Manjoume is going to get captured by the enemy AGAIN! I mean, he always gets captured. :)

Momo M. Taro or Pepper from Fallen Angel

They were so getting shot this year.
loved this line lol great chaps love the manjyoume Judai moments only complaint is that manjyoume seems a bit too meek especially with judai other than that no complaints please update soon!!

Me: Now that sucks. If school had that many rules, I would just drop out immediately. XD I feel sorry for Judai and the rules...

Hmm...Raphael...I think I heard that name before. Isn't he from the original series?

Continue to upload.

Me: Hmm. Poor Edo. Getting accused of something that he didn't do.

Yohko: It was Judai but no one would suspect him.

Me: So in personality. Continue to upload.

Me: Another interesting chapter. I'm still wondering if the I guess right in the last chapter.

Yohko: Doubt it. Continue to upload.

Lol! ^-^ This is cool and neat! ^-^ Keep it up!

cool update
This chapter was very cute but with dark over tones
How come Manjyoume didnt punch Juudai when they got back?

Me: Uh...uh...uh...uh...

Yohko: Momo is trying to think of a word about the chapter.

Me: Uh...popsicles!

Kitsune: That what she says...

Me: Who the brother in law is -reads the chapter again- I think it's that guy from the old Yugioh series after the Doom arc. The guy with the pink hair! Forgot his name, but...

Yohko: Momo is happy that she had something to read. Continue to upload.

Me: YOU ROCK DUDE!

LIEK OMG GRATE STORI. LAWL.

You'll probably be sorely disappointed when you see that your latest review is just from me, but that's okay; I'm willing to live with that. I completely forgive myself. I'll buy you popsicles to make up for it, but NO elevator spelunking!

Anyway, I just wanted to say again how thrilled I am that you've finally come out of the Duel Academy closet and started this story, because it's coming along fantastically and only promises to get better. I'm still firmly convinced you have the best and truest-to-canon Manjoume and Judai in the fandom, and from the scenes I've seen you prepping your handle on everyone else ain't too shabby either.

Also, the first scene still makes me glee uncontrollably. It's not just the watermelon passage and it's not just the delightful tarotic symbolism of the ten-punch kill, both of which I've gushed about to you; it's not even just the entire handling of grownup!Judai. Which is stunning. It's just the way the whole thing comes together, both more and less subtle than the foreshadowing used for the same (but less bloody) confrontation in the series. Also, the fact that you killed Saiou only a few weeks before canon did the same thing. I know you've been talking about doing it for over a year, but MAN. Talk about awesome timing. The fact that your method actually allows Saiou to accomplish his personal goal of 'escaping his fate' where the real story didn't is sweet even in its violence. And that's saying something.
Mostly though. . .just, thank GOD you're going to have a grownup!Judai who -actually acts like a grownup-. I'm so sick of him being a glorified angry psycho teen angstbomb; it's so OOC.

Anyway, I'm babbling. I can't wait for Marco Polo, so send me the next chapter soon, okay? I'll try not to miss anything this time. . . (I saw a 'sound' in there I should have pointed out to be changed to 'sounded'. e.e Oops. I'm a bad beta)

I was pleasantly surprized by this fic I thought that maybe it wouldnt be very well written but came back and decided to give a go the writing is terrific and flows well and you have captured manjyoume's and juudai's personalities exceptionally well and has a very exciting plot going is juudai insane or evil great plot twist out of curiousity is this manjyoume/juudai or is it a friend one? either way great fic and I await your next update great work

Kai

*is thoroughly stunned*

At this very moment I'm quite torn between gaping at the screen like an idiot and demanding an update as fast as humanly possible! I never thought I'd live to see the day, but from amid all of the mindless or mediocre sludge that has overrun the GX section, a work of quality has finally risen! Thank you, Lord Almighty! *flinches and waits for Juudai-kun to go medieval on her sorry arse*

So far this story is - almost - the only one in the entire section to have passed all of my expectancies and rigors with flying colours. Grammar-wise there have not been any jarring mistakes that I could have picked up, even at a more thorough glance; all of the characterizations so far have been sound and true to the original characters, while also leaving room for development in the narrative of your own version of events for the third Season.

What has truly managed to pique my interest and kept me gripped during these three chapters has been the superb manner in which the characters are fleshed out and in which they interact with each other - a flow so natural that I do not have difficulty imagining this plot as being part of an actual episode. Juudai's characterization, in particular, has impressed me - it aptly showcases the almost duality of his nature, while making it seem like a very smooth transition, instead of the jarring, abrupt switches that I've so far come across. The prologue, in particular, was a brilliant piece of character development and Juudai's thoughts in regards to his own self were a wonderful touch, so much so that the entire scene ended up giving me chills (the kind born of anticipation and pleasure, not fear).

Several scenes in the second chapter caught my attention as well - mainly what I more or less perceived to be an undercurrent of symbolism behind the moments inside the elvator, the flashlight's 'death' and the rising of quiet darkness almost a foreboding herald of what may come, coupled with Manjoume's feelings of inadequacy and his realization that a religious doctrine cannot be fully held accountable for his own actions and beliefs.

Going past the fact that I am a Fianceshipper at heart (though quality fiction should not be judged by shipping boundaries) I can say that I've been throughly impressed by what you have written so far and I more than eagerly await to see how your take on the narrative will unfold from now on.

Best wishes,

Gabi


P.S. - As soon as my eyes landed on The Mad's Poet's name, credited as a major contributor to this story I knew that I had managed to find something wonderful!

Me: So much happened!

Yohko: Momo just say you don't undrestand it!

Me: I do! Jun and Judai went to hide the book, Judai went evil for a minute but turns back to normal and then they hide the book, right?

Yohko: Momo doesn't really understand why Judai went evil for a second.

Kitsune: Continue to upload. Momo hopes to see you at Sakura con.

oNe of the best stories here! Is it yaoi? Also, I want MORE!!