i guess that was interesting :P next please make more

:D

That was awesome. I love your subtle style!

I'm quite curious. What did Nanoha do? >D To make Fate so... ebil >D

D

wow, this little one-shot is hot. and hilarious to boot. Nanoha's thought thru out are just plain funny and Suzuka and Hayate just added to everything. Fate is well.. Fate's just awesome. kind of sadistic but in a fun kinky way. hehe

All I gotta say is:
I like Fate-chan on top.

That was one of the best Nanoha/Fate stories I've read. Subtlety was good, very good. It was also great you managed to add humor to it.

Nanoha would still insist on seeing them. XD Stubborn very much.

Poor Arisa, she really is clueless. So very dense, epecially since Hayate and Suzuka didn't bother to fill her in. XD

yes! an awesome ero-ero fic! i LOVED it! there should be more lemons bout nanofate! y'know, i agree with you. fate-chan does seem to have a lot of different sides whenever she faces people. fate is one HOT tease! and doing those kinds of things while saying those kind of words to nanoha-chan makes reader-san very happy! VERY, VERY HAPPY indeed! ^_^

poor arisa-chan. she didn't have a clue to what hayate-chan and suzuka-chan were talking about.

I am LOVING the teasing side of Fate. Very sexy! *thumbs-up* ^/^

Ngg!

That has -got- to be one of the best N/F fics I've ever read!

Hot, believable, humorous and totally in character, though I can't help but wonder what poor Nanoha did to deserve such punishment. Or should I say reward? xD

Evil, naughty, sexy, teasing Fate for the win!

Fluffy... or at least sweet... i can see both being like that...

Yes, man,yes!

I LOVE YOU!

You have just totally hooked me on this series.

The only part I want to comment on would be the second scene,

third sentence and it reads: the slight frictions between hot,

sweaty skins so very electrifying.

It was the 'skins' part that got me. Makes it seem like they

both have more than one skin instead of it being plural as you

were trying to say they were both naked.

Other than that it's really good.

You know, you're really really a great writer. Even without using those term, you managed to convey everything perfectly. (I ned a cold shower now. :P)

I especially loved your closet-tease!Fate. I do really love to see her teasing Nanoha and generally have her being 'badass'. :d

People need to make you more bored and give you more picture of lemons.

lol, this was soo funny xD I LUV FATE but...sadly...I like her better with Nanoha...so
I cannot have her! OH WHEREFORE ART THOU FATE
WE CANNOT BE! xO LOL

*hearts in eyes* that was beautiful! one of the best nano/fate stories i've ever read. you should def have more than 15 comments for this

eek fate-chan was so...*sigh* hawt eek!