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| Mr 4. Strings 2008-03-05 ch 1,  | abuseDefinitely a good start. A few word errors here and there but nothing major. I thought the idea of beginning with the tail end of the battle was very compelling. We are left with absolutely no idea what caliber of pilot the main character is which I find intriguing. I did feel that the first chapter was a little short however. It played out more as one scene of a chapter as opposed to a chapter on it's own. Overall however I greatly enjoyed this story and I hope to read more of it in the future. |
| sodagod 2008-01-15 ch 1, | abusetoo short and too little information. |