hm what can i say about this chapter? I can see why it took you so long, not much was happening save for the fact that Mushu got to know more about Enlai and Ching got to know more about guardian business. I don't think it was bad at all though since Ching and Mushu got to know each other better. It helped develop their characters and helped them become closer.

Now that you got this chapter out of the way I really want you to continue, I really think you will end this story with a bang and that it will end beautifully. So please keep going I will be waiting for it once November ends. Don't give up you are almost done, I know its been a pain for you but I know you don't like to give up on things. So stay with it and like always keep up the good work and have fun writing. :)

Oh yes, good old memory of the broom chase. Had me loling there again xD

[random] (or whatever crickets used to hear with)
^ I heard that grasshoppers have them below their knee – aren’t crickets and grasshoppers somehow related?[/random]

Mental picture of Mushu carrying buckets of water is… scary, considering he can barely hold a sword, but then again Mulan couldn’t either by that time ;D
Ching has good chances in scaring me with her ideas of guardianship and “powers beyond your mortal imagination” – though Mushu is kinda at fault there himself as well. Anyhow a “helper” should not be mistaken for a “slave”.

Miki’s “outcoming” was a rather interesting twist in plot there, it kinda leaves the reader with suspense. She claims to be happy of course, but the first seed of doubt is there already, I wonder if we’re going to get any news about her on the travel back home. I am honest and I gota say I forgot: was her wedding scheduled at some point in the story?

“Mushu wanted to take some credit for this change, but he had to admit that it was all them. He was still pretty sure that his coaching did help Ching though, of course.“
^ Ever the same, ever the same *g*

Apparently the little not-dog brother has a greater role in this story than we all thought… I can’t fight away the feeling that he’s not really accepted in the Fa family because of things that would raise the rating of this fanfic, so I’m banishing this to the back of my mind since it can’t be.

And yay guardian explanation moments ~
I love these >D
Nuf said.

[random] “And you don’t have… meetings or anything like that?”
^ then ape will demand to get Mushu’s newspaper to check if he won something in lotto and the snake will cause a riot 8D[/random]

In the end it seems Mushu and Ching are one step further ahead again; they’re finally making progress in their ‘relationship’ – so to speak. Yet time seems not to be on their side – I’m kind of expecting some unforeseen interruption that they didn’t count in that will ruin their plans FOR TENSION! *shot*
If it’s not sooner, than later on the trip back home, which would make things even worse.
I’m such a bad person *shot again*

However, Enlai or not, there is still a prince charming announced that seems to wait somewhere out there, Mushu will probably have to bite his tongue when they stumble over him in any of the future chapters – if they will at all due to the baby, if that doesn’t ruin everything of the nice ancestors’ plans. However if they do meet and Mushu blabs of some sort, I can’t help but see Ching being kind of **, since – in a very abstract way – that boy will be “arranged”.

I feel like I’m drifting way too off from the actual chapter here... but I’m already looking forward to look back at this here, when the actual chapters are out xD
It’ll prolly be really awkward and full of fail.

However, I’m looking forward to the next instalment ^^

"He felt Ching halt and heard Miki again, slowly putting her train of thought back on track after the short detour."

Hey look I actually remembered my favorite line after I told you it, I just think it it was a clever way of putting those words together, i really liked it.

So Mushu does not know that Ching has a brother? Now this is interesting, I would love to hear their conversatin about that. I also loved how Mushu kept trying to adjust himself in the bag and I love how it fit perfectly with the idea of Mushu being chased away by the family, great job on that. And even though this chapter was hard for you, I think you did wonderfully. Its not too slow and there are no mistakes that I can see so yeah I liked it. Well I hope you update faster than last time. So keep up the good work and have fun writing. :)

“She’d been raised differently, and she thought differently, it seemed.“
'…that spoiled little brat.'
No don’t think like that of your guarded one! D8 *shot*

“He certainly was not comfortable with Ching enough to hide down her shirt like he sometimes had done with Mulan. It made him feel awkward just thinking about it, so he didn’t suggest it.“
It IS the worst place to hide anyway with the female gender, but now that you mention it IS questionable why Mulan had let him hide there, especially after that nice little eye-pass at her. So watching is bad, but CRAWLING there is fine… huh, cartoon logic. I’m rambling, back to topic %D

Miki all in all just seems like an immature preteen that’s going through the whole love thing for the first time.

I love the way you make Mushu go all “spy-agent” in the early middle *g*
In-Character points.
“So there weren’t even any other people in the house? Mushu had just done all of that sneaking around for nothing?“
That like just made my day, it’s just Mushu’s luck *g* And there we all thought he was supposed to be a lucky dragon.
Besides, Mushu peeking out of Chinese-porcelain is just too priceless, I need to bother someone to draw that for you 8D

You will have to draw a family tree with the relation of the gang of tree and Ching, because that’s… one of the things I can’t really get quite yet. xD”

“Oh, how is she?” - “Pregnant,”
Best – dialogue – ever.

“He didn’t quite understand everything, but he knew when his family was being insulted, and especially when Mulan was being insulted.“
DISHONOR!

“Mushu continued to seethe, and Ching watched him, surprised that he was actually offended on her behalf.”
““Is he ashamed of her?” His own question was something he could barely fathom.”
“Was that some sort of ‘guardian wisdom’?”
“that hand back up on her head.”
luv

“Ching really seemed like she needed some help with self-worth.“
A guardian is – despite what the name says not a body-guard, nor a “talking guard-dog”
A guardian is: a motivator, a trainer, a cook, a manager, a lawyer, a house-wife, a secretary, a spin-doctor, a friend, a lucky-charm…
flexible and basically anything you could wish for because they have to adapt to their guarded ones whether it’s a cook, a hockey-player, a girl in armour or one that’s afraid of marriage x3

glad to have you back, can't wait to read more!

I liked that ending part and how Mushu gave her some guardian wisdom. I'm glad Mulan stood up for her and let her choose her own husband and not have a matchmaker choose. She seems like the kind of girl who would rather getted married later rather than earlier. And I think I forgot to mention this when I read the first part over but i love how annoying Miki sounds, she just won't shut up about her marriage and it just makes it interesting to bring tension to those two. Any way don't give up on this story, keep going, I know you have something planned for this story that we have yet to see and I can't wait to see that. So keep up the good work and have fun writing. :)

Ching and Mushu are finally on the right way =)

I loved the fact how Mushu was bothered by Ching calling the cricket “Cri-kee” I wonder what Disney had in mind upon creating a sidekick team with such a life-span difference…
Oh well, “It was nice while it lasted” huh?

And heck, I don’t know how often I read that paragraph with Mushu’s little “basket” xD

Imaging Ching sleeping looked… yes indeed weird in head. But who sleeps normal? Seriously – I probably tend to curl up like this myself too… xD

And heck the tick is somewhat bugging me, especially since you kept it away from the readers eyes to say. We may know that there is a tick, but we do not know if she was crawling or already bit in or stuff like that, Mushu should be a little more alerted with stuff like that. Careless little… ohforgetit xD
But hey, ticks may be overrated anyway. I’m living a few meters away from a forest and had quite some ticks in my life already.

And then there’s this smell of Mulan/Mushu in the air x3 *hrhr*

//“Your grandmother didn’t think of me like that, I wasn’t anything else but her friend. I helped her out through most of her biggest and baddest times, too.”
“But, is that normal?” she asked “for a… guardian?”
Mushu leaned his head to one side then the other, deliberating. “Probably not,” he admitted, but stayed firm with his defense.//
I shall glomp you for this now


Fazit:
//but I guess that you’re really just like a talking guard dog.//
pwned

I really liked your description of Mushu waking up, the scene looked so peaceful in my mind with Mushu looking around the tent and seeing everyone alseep. Even though Ching was sleeping in a goofy angle. Very good though well done. I hope you update again soon and keep up the good work and have fun writing. :)

Cri-Kee-x is such a sweetie xD You just wanna hug him here and then again you fear to hurt him somehow.

Innocent Retinas, huh?
"With my eyes, I can see straight through your armour"
Very innocent xD
But hey, even if he learned it the hard way - he now knows that women don't like that ;P
I love this chapter, it's all "Whoa"

Now that accidental encounter was awesome! I could just picture what was going on in my mind from Pahlin's butt to Mushu slowly lifting his ears to see if Ching really had her unmentionables covered. Great job on that, it was a cute chapter, I liked how he and Cri-kee set up the tent together, that was nice of them. Hopefully Ching will now be nicer to them. Any way great job, I can't wait to see more so keep up the good work and have fun writing. :)

Wtf - I just noticed that somehow swallowed my entire review. Must have been for the html-tag in a heart smiley.
That's so unfair xx"

I'll just TRY to put it together again, alright? alright xx" The following Review is for Chp 5, not 4.

I LOVE your humor! The conversation between Mushu and the horse were splendid. How old do horses get actually? Khan was awesome, it's so like him to spread this Mushu-hate he had xD

I especially loved how you mentioned the "Guardian rules" and such, as you meanwhile know I've been thinking a lot about them myself already x3 And I'm looking forward to what you make out of it =)
And Cri-Kee-X is such a TRAITOR ;P
I can see where the name could get irritating if you would read it out in letters oo" (besides, it must be a hell to type and most of all remember the number all the time), but I actually thought you would pronounce it the sole number and I don't see "24" as such a big problem.

"He said some insulting things about my mother, and I don't even know if they are true." LOL that was great. I really liked the coversation between Mushu and Cri Kee x, you can tell they are starting to bond and become good friends. I hope him and Ching become good friends too. I really liked this chapter and truthfully I don't think you should try to think too much about it, its still a fantastic story and no matter how worried you become about it being boring I will still keep reading it. Well please continue and keep up the good work and have fun writing. :)

I love your humor

hey I liked this chapter! I really liked the conversation between Mushu and Cri Kee XXIV I thought it was cute, he seems like a simple little cricket. I also like how Ching doesn't care if Mushu comes at all, it just makes it sound different rather than having her get all excited that a dragon was coming. Great job, hope you update soon so keep up the good work and have fun writing. :)

Actually, I thought this was a pretty good start. You've managed to keep Mushu in good form without making him overly annoying. I feel sorry for him, though, now that Grandma is an ancestor!

I like the idea of Cri-Kee XXIV. I wonder if his personality will be the same?

Happy writing!