Hm, very interesting. I like some of the phrases you used, "demons that call you son" even though it's a bit cliched.

Keep writing!

very dark piece. Toby seems to be echoing Lucy's lines from the reprise of "Johanna" interesting how the crazy characters seem to have the most insight. Good work.

Absolutely superb. You did so much with so few words.

That was great- short but very poignant. Something about the repetitiveness and flow of it reminded me of nursery rhymes, which is very fitting with Toby's character.

Beautiful. The poor thing feels so betrayed it's impossible not to feel his pain along with him, and you despair at the fact he had to grow up all in one night. Where Toby says "Take my word for it" especially, there is a kind of power and passion behind the words here that you almost never get on this website, so I don't think there is a word of praise I can give that would adequately express how thrilled I was to read this piece. It's absolutely stunning.

Incredibly short and yet incredibly forceful. It sort of reminds me of Sweeney's view of London in the beginning of the movie (I have not been fortunate enough to see the play...yet) when he tells Anthony he is too young to know how awful London truly is. In this, Toby seems to have learned. "A family will cost you your mind." Simply brilliant.