Hmm... I'm sorry, I've never been good at critiquing first chapters, especially short ones like this, especially since it's so vague anyway (Which is great, by the way, I'm just not sure what to say.)
At any rate, it seems interesting. I can't wait to see you continue!

haha, I like that- Valentine is allergic to Stinkie!good one :D

Oh, this is so good! Wow--you added three chapters this time! :) I love the Hippie Seance and the description of what happened gave me chills. Valentine is a great character, and I can't wait to see what happens next...

Very good and unique, as always. You write with a very modern flair--very gritty and to the point--you write tight and don't waste a word. Excellent! Don't wait so long to update because I can't wait to see how all these new specters come together in your story.

needs another updaate!

I love this story so much! can't wait for an update!

Hey, oh talented one!

I liked this story--it is very unique and sweetly told. You use words in a unique way (I love the word stressant!). So you can produce amazing art and write> very cool! Update soon!

wow
this is really good, save for some grammar mistakes...but whatever
updateupdateupdate!

update please
I love it
would Stretch really be like that even if he is drunk?