Reviews for Don't be a von Karma

Reviews For: Don't be a von Karma

AA-Tenks 2008-08-09 ch 4,	abuseThat was nice. I like how Maya is developing her feelings for Franziska slowly. Can't wait for the next chapter!
me 2008-03-14 ch 1, anon.	abuseneeds moar steven
purrpickle 2008-03-14 ch 4,	abuseWow. Yes, this is turning out beautifully. The way you write not just only about the characters but about their surroundings and weather as well... It's mesmerizing. And the relationship is so engrossing and cute and deep, in a way. You certainly have the characters down pat. Keep up the good work, and I cannot wait for more! -purrpickle
Kudo 2008-03-10 ch 4, anon.	abuseAww! cries That was so... so... cute! But now, I wanna read more. Please update soon! _ Oh, I almost forgot... Cookies for you for the Lana/Mia reference bows
Kudo 2008-03-01 ch 3, anon.	abuseAmazing. Really, simply amazing. I love this fic, and I really hope you keep writing.
Xithon 2008-02-29 ch 3,	abuseReally have loved this story so far for a few reasons. Firstly is that I am impressed and surprised by the way you managed capture the feelings of both Maya and Franziska in their own ways in retrospect to their past experiences and tragedies. Very cleverly written. I guess the other reason would be the fact you've come up with an original (in my opinion) coupling of characters, one which I hadn't considered beforehand, despite making sense in a way: two young ladies of the same age, with entirely different backgrounds. I so hope you continue this piece of fiction, it's a real pleasure to read something as fresh as this regarding the PW world. One suggestion which has already been brought up is the spelling and grammatical errors (more the latter) -although they didn't spoil the mood at all, there were parts which I had to read over about 3 or 4 times to fully understand. I'd get it beta-read next time. Thanks for a so-far highly intriguing story with so much potential!
purrpickle 2008-02-27 ch 2,	abuseAnd wow... I said you're instead of your... Sorry about that. Anyway, I liked this chapter as well. It's a real insight into the mind of Maya Fey, especially all that's happened to her. And, to reiterate, I love your use of words! Much kudos, -purrpickle
purrpickle 2008-02-27 ch 3,	abuseWow. This is still so good! I love you're imagery and talent with words. I'm glad I came back and read more of this story! hops up and down You make this so feasible! Well... Keep up the good work! Thank you, -purrpickle
Roxius 2008-02-26 ch 1,	abuseHa ha, this is awesome! I read this on the forums of Court Records and I'm glad the Ace Attorney series is getting more shoujo ai stuff in it! Please update with the fourth chapter soon!
Kudo 2008-02-08 ch 1, anon.	abuseWoah... Amazing! I never had though of this pairing before, but now I LOVE it. Cookies for you for writing this! I'm looking forward to next chapter :D!
A.Syndikai 2008-01-16 ch 2,	abuseIntriguing. Great way to end the chapter. You may want to get a beta to read your submissions to polish them up, though. Some changes in sentence structure would help with the flow of the story. Other than that, I'll be waiting for the confrontation between Maya and Franziska!
LazyCatfish27 2008-01-12 ch 1,	abuseOMG! I never expected to see a fic like this this one! I hope there's going to be more chapters, but please PLEASE edit more carefully! You spelled Franziska's name wrong most of the time and some of your sentences were worded so awkwardly that I couldn't figure out what you were saying! I'm not saying it isn't good, because I like the fic, I'm just saying please edit carefully before you post. Too many typos and grammatical errors can ruin an otherwise perfect story. (That said, no one's perfect and I find myself having to go back and correct mistakes in my fics all the time)
DonnaUotani 2008-01-11 ch 1,	abuseWow I loved the way you wrote Franziska and also I love that you wrote a Fran X Maya story!
A.Syndikai 2008-01-11 ch 1,	abuseKudos to you for writing a Fran x Maya fic! I've been interested in seeing someone's serious portrayal of this pair. So far, so good. There are some spelling/grammatical errors, but not enough to take away from one's basic understanding of the story. I liked your attention to details--it was easy to visualize Franziska in the restroom scene. Please continue writing!
purrpickle 2008-01-11 ch 1,	abuseOh my, yes. This is very good. I love the characterizations and the dialogue and the whole... experience of the space? I can't remember the word I wanted to use. Anyway, I really really like this and look forward to more. It's really well written. -purrpickle

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