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| Arae Arca 2008-06-07 ch 1,  | abuseThis is very touching and sad. Nice work. :( |
| moo 2008-06-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseHoly crap, that is all their is to say |
| PadawanMage 2008-04-23 ch 1, | abuseDamn, that is powerful. I actually saved Ash but did see a vid on youtube of her dying. You definitely captured that moment. Good job! |
| Ruttan 2008-03-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseVery nice. I never really liked Ashly, but your story makes me think there might be something that I have missed. Very well done. Keep up the good work |
| Pathogen34988 2008-02-09 ch 1, | abusedamn, i cryed its GOOD read mine, tell me what u think (if thats a link yay for me) |
| rex41e 2008-02-03 ch 1, | abuseThat was beautifull... I felt so sad to see either of them die, It really hurt me, i think its a true step forward to see video games with so much drama. |
| Stockman06 2008-01-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseGreat story, i never thought of doing one from ash's perspective at that point. Very in-depth on her final thoughts. Overall excellent |
| halothird 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was a good fic. I don't do fanfic really these days, but that was an exceptionally good one by you. Most people have loads of errors when they write and are so inconsistent. They often break up paragraphs with wrong words and so on. I was like that once XD. Well it was good and maybe you'd be interested in doing a joint ME fic? Email me or leave me a PM. Head over to fictionpress if you want to to check my newer stuff. I use same pen name. All in all, descriptive, but not to over the top. I really got the feeling you intended though, even though I think Ash was a xenophobic ** who i was glad to be rid of :p 9.2/10 |
| Protector 2008-01-20 ch 1, | abuseVery well written though a detached third person view might've worked better, for me at least. But you captured the mood of the last 10 or seconds of Ash's life perfectly. Well done |
| magooglersriot 2008-01-18 ch 1, | abusethats really good. its like what you would think actually happened there. but its kinda sad though, with the whole dieing part. :( But anyway, you should write some more stories. |
| kosmokomik 2008-01-17 ch 1, | abuseThis wrenched me. You nailed Ash perfectly. |
| Cuteaccent 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseBrutal & Brilliant. |
| Chaos Githzerai 2008-01-12 ch 1, | abuseThis was a very good read, and I love how well you express Ashley's feelings when she's fighting and at the end. |
| Chaosian 2008-01-12 ch 1, | abuseWhen i first played the game i choose Ash to die. Afterwards I felt kinda bad. After reading this story, it adds to my appreciation of Ashley. Great piece! |
| Uilleand 2008-01-12 ch 1, | abuseMarvellous!! Perfectly heart-wrenching...and a great balance between facing the last moments as a soldier and as a woman. |