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| saziehorserocks 2008-06-14 ch 1,  | abusethis is really good! |
| vampirechick123 2008-04-27 ch 1, | abuseOMG that was so cute. that had just the right amoun of fluff and angst and was just really good. i wrote somehting like that sit. but it was totaly diff. amzing |
| Sheik360 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseYay! Awesome, Bella. Katie-chan, as Abby-chan would say. |
| abovetherim 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abusegood job that was really well done! |
| Jasper and Onyx 2008-01-12 ch 1, | abuseKaity-Chan you dare to post something about Jasper without telling Me?!?!?!?!?!? Maybe I should hold kimikat hostage for a while... |
| musically inclined 2008-01-12 ch 1, | abuseThat was great! I have always wondered exactly what happened after Jasper did that. Great job! Musically Inclined |
| pixieandsoldier 2008-01-12 ch 1, | abuseThat was SO CUTE! I loved it, thank you for writing about Jasper, he doesn't get enough credit. emeraldlover |
| Laughing Dragoness 2008-01-12 ch 1, | abuseCute idea! This story has great potential. Just a couple of things, a little constructive criticism- The whole thing could stand to be longer. I'm not saying that you have a length minimum or anything, but I think that some descriptions, more dialogue, and maybe going a bit deeper into Jasper's thoughts would give the story a little more depth. One little nit-picky thing at the end. Vampires don't pant, because they don't have to breathe. They can run for hours and not get tired, if not indefinitely. You did a great job with grammer and spelling (which is refreshing, let me tell you). Good work overall, and a pleasure to read. |