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2x2 2008-06-29 ch 1, anon.	abuseJust found this, and absolutely loved it. I love the edge they walk with their conversation, so close to tipping into a real agument and hurt feelings so many times, but finally managing to say something honest and meaningful to each other. Well done!
Kshar 2008-04-10 ch 1,	abuseGorgeous. Funny, charming and perfectly in character.
Nr.Six 2008-03-21 ch 1,	abuseYay! Great story, very funny, hehe with the spoon on the table and the lipstick! hehe. Wish it went like this in the show!
Meadow 2008-02-23 ch 1, anon.	abuseIts always very refreshing to find fanfiction that is well written. Your characters are believeable, right down to their dialects. I know that reviews are supposed to critique someone's work in order to help them write better but honestly, I can't find anything. Your spelling and grammar is almost perfect and the characters are, well, in character. This in itself is, as I said, refreshing, as well as extremely rare when someone is using someone else's characters. I can only hope that you write your own original work if not now then in the future, because you do have a talent.
Nell 2008-02-12 ch 1, anon.	abuseThat was remarkably in character -- I could almost imagine it happening this way on screen! And I love the detail about the cook.
ant77 2008-01-26 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis is SUCH an amazing story! One of the best I've read. Mal and Inara are very much in character and I could actually see the scene taking place in my head as I was reading this!
Ieyre 2008-01-22 ch 1,	abuseThe fluff is making me sick. This was amazing and cute for an amazing screen couple that never fully got their due. I love it!
IrishUnicorn 2008-01-16 ch 1,	abuseThank You! Good Lord, I've been hankering something fierce for some awesome Mal/Inara fics, and this one just fit the bill perfectly. The dialogue was beautiful and perfect. I could actually picture it happening right before my eyes. But this is my favorite piece if dialogue: “The pot being a hypocrite ain’t making the kettle any less black.” This really made me day!
jane0904 2008-01-16 ch 1,	abuseExcellent piece of work! The pricklyness still apparent, the quick touch and retreat ... and finally the kiss. They'll still argue - a lot - but that's fun too.
jh099 2008-01-15 ch 1,	abuseWow, you wrote Mal's character...perfectly. If I didn't know better, I'd assume you were one of the script writers for the show.
GoldnWlf 2008-01-13 ch 1,	abuseA little bird told me about this fic and I just want to say thanks for making me laugh and swoon over my favorite Serenity couple. The dialog is perfect and I could definitely see this happening on the show.
writtenwordlover 2008-01-13 ch 1,	abuseWow! You nailed their dialogue... some of the best I've read in a long while, and didn't skim over their issues, strong characterizations for both, planning a longer fic?
Alison M. DOBELL 2008-01-13 ch 1, anon.	abuseAbsolutely brilliant! You have captured them both perfectly, the dialogue was stunning - so very in character for them both, with the back and forth dance they do now softened with a more revealing intent and at last, they finally confess what they both want. Made my little heart go pit-a-pat and left me with a great big happy smile on my face. Shiny! Ali D :~) You can't take the sky from me
Ellisguy 2008-01-13 ch 1,	abuseI'm certain the rest of the crew was eavesdropping on this conversation. River, the brat she is, likely piped it into wherever the rest of the crew was (i.e. Kaylee in the engine room, Simon in the infirmary, Jayne in his bunk, and Zoe, with her, on the bridge).
Katie 2008-01-12 ch 1, anon.	abuseSo while I did read this fic while it was in progress, thus you already know my thoughts, hopefully I can prompt some reviewyness from others who enjoy the little ficlet prompt prompt pets fic This is so very adorable and I love it. I do think you did particularly well with the dialogue. I love “The pot being a hypocrite ain’t making the kettle any less black.” I did laugh right out loud a good few times. So thumbs up on the humor. On the other hand, you were able to accurately capture the delicate balance between fighting, putting up barriers, taking them down, and kissin’. Not an easy task to accomplish! I think you did well on your characterization and it’s a very conceivable scene to play out. … you should find some way to post your fanart of Mal and Inara makin’ out on the table. ;) snugs and scampers off so Mal and Inara can get back to kissin’

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