Ouch.

I came into this expecting humor, looked at the genre, and ended up liking it anyway. Very apt metaphor.

You know, this COULD have come off as something pretty... nasty and crude, given the title name. But it didn't. And I'm glad it didn't, because the metaphor, this fic, all of it just screams incredible depth.

And oh, the last line... classic, and unbelievably sad.

Great job :)

- M.

Aaw. That's so sad. And true, unfortunately.
I love the depth of this... it's just a metaphor, but it really strikes true, you know? Totally awesome.

God, dude. @_@

This is an extremely clever metaphor.

Also, it's nice to read something more serious from you.

oh noes :O

dnt leave him stanny!

lol, love the story hun! great job!

Aww what a sad story.

wow, that was really really good. you write very well!! hopefully you'll write more soon and i liked the idea for this haha it was one of those oneshots you hate to see end just because it was wirtten well and was just a good idea for a post but this was really good

Wow. Just wow.

Seriously, I realise this is just a reflection or angsting, but you had me hooked. This is one hell of an extended metaphor, and I've got to say, your style of writing is just so flowing, it's wonderful. And unfortunately so true.

Brilliant, I hope to read more from you.

Gari

woe, i didn't get this story at all.

Hooray, this is fantastic! I'm so thriled to see you post--your profile made me laugh so hard, and I was just praying you'd become a regular writer. Your tone is amazing.

I love how this could've been the crudest metaphor ever, but you chose to take such an elegant, well-crafted approach. Mature, lovely. And the worst part is, this whole piece seems so effortless--it's kind of stream-of-consciousness, yet I can tell you now that your inner voice is about a thousand times more introspective, refined, and charming than mine is. (Mine talks about cookies a lot. And mud wrestling, ftw.)

You've got to keep writing. Not even four hundred words, and I'm oohing and aahing. I'd love to see future projects from you--don't leave me hanging!