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| allymcnally 2008-03-22 ch 11,  | abuseFirst chapter was good, went downhill after that. |
| saragillie 2008-03-12 ch 4, | abuseGood story so far in terms of the basics. Booth and Brennan wouldn't be legally allowed to speak to Jennifer and David unless a parent/guardian/social worker was there. I'm really interested to see if you're going to do a Jennifer/Bones connection... |
| saragillie 2008-03-12 ch 1, | abuseI would like to say that IRL, Booth would never have been handling those clothes. All contact leaves a trace and the fact that he picked them up could destroy evidence. I know you wrote Brennan saying there's nothing more to learn from them (which seems reasonable) but she would have scolded him for contaminating evidence. |
| Hidden Fairy 2008-02-11 ch 11, | abuseWell i loved it. Thought it had a great plot! and who cant love Booth and Brennan? Hidden Fairy |
| Hidden Fairy 2008-02-11 ch 1, | abuseYou will get a bigger review at the end of the fic. and i dont actually know what she wrote on the note. but if you thought of the sentence... "Seeley, even though love is a very irrational thing, I think I love you." Well i think this is the actually thing that she should have written! I love it! its perfect! Hidden Fairy |
| BlueTigress 2008-02-05 ch 11, | abuseGreat ending!! I've heard about that hypothermia cure before, and I think it fits very very very well into ff!! :D Can't wait for your new story!!;D |
| iamwriter 2008-02-05 ch 9, | abuseI knew I didnt like Sweets |
| iamwriter 2008-02-05 ch 7, | abuseOh my. Cant wait to hear what Bones has to say to that. |
| iamwriter 2008-02-05 ch 2, | abuseI am glad she didn't jump back immediately with Sully, he has been gone a year. And poor Booth. |
| Caravida 2008-01-29 ch 10, | abuseFirstly, let me say that this is a great first fic, and kudos for having the guts to get it out as a freshman (I didn't!). You have some good ideas, and the best thing to do now would be just to keep writing to polish them. Maybe try some other ships, too. I loved your "sexuality [of the kiss]" scene, it was too cute! Okay, you asked for it (lol): there are a couple grammar and spelling errors, mostly in the first couple chapters, but nothing huge. I can tell you if you really want, but I won't waste the space to now. One thing to definately look out for is being too cheesy. It can ruin a good fluffy fic. As for Jenny's phone call scene, my only question is, how did they know it was a kidnapping so quickly? Jenny's high tension is fine, as this is a completely new family situation for her, but Angie and Booth?? Again, great job and keep it up - good luck! |
| BlueTigress 2008-01-22 ch 9, | abuseI knew it, I knew it!! That sweets guy was just creeping me out! And now he got Bren but Booth will get him and whipe that stupid grinn of of his face!! Can't wait for more!! :D |
| SquintSquad10 2008-01-22 ch 9, | abuseI love this story! Your writing is very in character and the plotline is great... I can see this being an episode. I'm a freshman too and I wish I could write like this! Great job!! :] |
| Angel By Friends 2008-01-19 ch 8, | abuseThis is great! A. |
| BlueTigress 2008-01-19 ch 8, | abuseGreat story so far! Love the confession! :D And how she turned Sully down was great!! Can'T wait to read more!! :D I hope you had fun xcskiing!! |
| Angel By Friends 2008-01-18 ch 7, | abusedude that is so mean leaving it right there. email me when you write more? i have loved it so far. the bringing in another sibling meant that max has so many more secrets when bones thought he had told all. its aweosme! |