|Reviews for Fated|
| JJ 4/28/09 . chapter 10
I wonder what Yukimura is going to do now that he overheard that snippet
and poor Ryoga
he's been such a victim of everything!
| JJ 4/28/09 . chapter 9
I never thought of the business world as a war until reading this story! you're so in-depth on this i'm surprised i like this story! i mean i hate economics and business stuff so i was a bit skeptical about reading from you even if lots of people suggested i do!
But you put it in with such a flow that i don't even realize i'm actually learning a bit of business while oogling my favorite pair!
After this chapter, i think i know why bussinessmens are always dying!
| JJ 4/28/09 . chapter 8
The chapter overall fulfilled most of my desirs i wanted to see EXCEPT for the fact that Atobe walked in on them! but now i get to anticipate LATER! SQUEALS
| JJ 4/28/09 . chapter 7
Talk about wish and granted!
thanks for the character list and the chapter is unusually shorter... nonetheless it was very enjoyable!
| JJ 4/28/09 . chapter 6
I find myself loving all your characters whether they are oc's or original! i love how they interact and create the company. Hopefully it'll give way to more great things
one more thing, i'd like a clarification on all characters... i sometimes forget who is who.
| JJ 4/28/09 . chapter 5
poor Ryoga! just when he was about to do his thing , the paprazzi kills it!
But great chapter overall, i can't wait to read more!
| JJ 4/28/09 . chapter 4
I can't stop reading this story now!
It's so god and Atobe appearance [ he's my favorite character] was loved!
| jj 4/28/09 . chapter 3
WOW! you're awesome at this!
i didn't even realize how log the chapter was until you mentioned it at the bottom!
But you've captured me completely with this chapter! i love the development!
| JJ 4/28/09 . chapter 2
it is Ryoma that Fuji picked up right?
I hope you don't mind if I review for every chapter because I like to clarify what i read and review.
| JJ 4/28/09 . chapter 1
it sounds awesome so far!
| cheriesluv 4/27/09 . chapter 14
This story is one of the most amazing, and saddest I've ever read...I was crying when Shun and Nanako died...These business people might as well be the mafia with how they work.
On a lighter note, you're fast becoming one of my most favorite authors. The stories you write mostly rotate around the business world, but still, the quality is astounding. Continue with your good writing!
PS, Please don't be offended I only review once. I only ever review a story once. I don't do it by chapter. 3
| TeNsHi No ToIkI 4/27/09 . chapter 14
omg how could u kill kenya n nanako n shun? T.T... poor ryoma n ryosuke n kamui!
| GreenAwesomeness 4/26/09 . chapter 14
This was great as always. I'm surprised this story doesn't have more reviews.
| Gyokuei Kuragari 4/25/09 . chapter 14
XD Well, you DIDN'T. xDD
Yup. A good 40 pages...How did you not notice that? lol.
( The updates this time were short. I do have to admire your comitement to writing though. xD I know I wouldn't be able to write so much for such a long period of time... Heck, I'd probably give up after a few updates. xD I write with too much imagery. xDD
D: The deaths... :(
:O COMMA MISTAKES! rofl. I didn't keep track on where they were though, sorry. xDD
Some Mistakes: (If you want to change them...I just HAD to point them out. lol)
“We’re going to need a lot of luck!” Ryoga said with a grim expression. Acting like a fugitive wasn’t on his schedule for the day but it seemed he was going to have to shot and maybe even kill someone today.
Uh...I think that you meant to put "shoot" instead of "shot" there, right? XD If not, please explain. xDD
“Does any of your phone work out here?”
I'm pretty sure that "does" should be "Do" and that phone should be plural.
“Mine had a bit of reception!” Nanako said more with relief than confirmation.
*has It should be present tense, not past tense.
Dialing quick, she dialed department X’s section as fast as she could hoping her husband would be in there if not Kirihara-san.
Shouldn't it be "dialing quickly"?
Hmm... I guess I'll find out in the next update who Rina will call... I have a suspicion though. xD But with your twists, it might be confusing.
| ObsidianEbony 4/25/09 . chapter 14
There was a lot of really intense action in here. It's really cool how you can keep up the excitement and suspense.
So...update soon please!