This story as an interesting concept and I'm curious about what will happen next ^^ I also hope that we'll find out who it was that tried to bring Hughes back...

Wow, it's great really! It's not so easy to find a good quality fic, but i have just been incredibily lucky it seems :) Very promising story. The plot's genial and your writing style's very good and smooth-flowing. And the Roy-Ed interaction!... priceless :) Not to mention at this point curiosity is going to kill me... what happens next? Please, keep writing! :)

Okay, first things first.
Let's start with the good. I love, love, LOVE your characterization. Roy and Ed, especially, seem to be spot on. I can almost hear them arguing when I read their dialogue. Good, really good characterization is so hard to find these days.
Secondly, I love what you've done with Hughes. You've overcome the temptation of simply bringing him back immortal and have addressed the fact that Homunculi are NOT the people they were created to be (no matter how much we want them to be ;_;) I also think you picked an awesome sin for keeping some of his original desires/personality traits while blending in the inherent qualities of both that specific sin and the homunculus. Awesome job!
Okay, now my nitipcs... and I really don't have anything but the occasional typo/left out word, which I do quite often myself.

Me:OH MY GOD!ROY!(Slaps homunculus Hughes in the face)NO!BAD MAES!VERY BAD MAES!GET THAT EVILNESS OUT OF YOUR SYSTEM RIGHT NOW!DON'T YOU DARE TOUCH MUSTANG!HE'S MINE!(Grabs Roy and runs off while cackling manically)

Roy:Why are all my fangirls insane?

Me:BECAUSE WE LOVE YOU AND THIS STORY!

Spottedstar, leader of windclan

Typos are not bad, I just have one question, doesn't Hughes have yellow/amber eyes? Yeah, stupid detail, but I find myself caring about it.
Another excellent chapter, by the way. I can't wait to figure out how Roy deals with this one. Poor Roy, though, he's getting a taste of his own medicine. He's forced to learn the hard way what happens when people keep secrets from you for your "protection."

This is my first (of probably many) homunculus-Hughes fics, and its good, I like it. I like the way you merged Hughes with Greed so that he is not completely one or the other, but both. I'm sure a lot of Hughes fans would be so tempted to create a homunculus that was just an immortal Hughes. Unfortunately, that probably couldn't happen...sigh.
Still, are we ever going to learn who created the new Greed, or is that the reason he/she went splat? I must continue. Please update soon.

Wow... I would never had thought of someone trying to bring Hughes back. ^_^ Creepy and cool at the same time. Can't wait to what happens next!

YOu are doing Great. I saw the who Hughes thing back in the second chapter. BUt I love where the plot is going.Wonderful job on the character and background descriptions. Can't wait for the next chapter.

The new Greed is scary.

I so like your humonculus Hughes.
His agenda/obsession with the real Hughes' family and friends is interesting, frightening, and sad.

Barbara

Oh dear...

Oh, you're killing me here. That last bit was just perfect. Noticed a couple of typos but otherwise... great work as usual.

Sorry if Kita not reviewing with me is a bother, but she's nowhere near the FMA fan that I am...

Eagerly awaiting the next chapter of both this and "Incendiary Relations."
~Subu

I'm really liking this fic so far - looks like you've got something good here! I can't wait to read more ^o^!

~Ryopon~

Me likey. Continue, please!

In that little Greed part where he was watching Ed and Roy in Roy's office, i had the odd feeling that it was implying yaoi. Was it? It was a good chapter ^^ very nice, poor Gracia, it must be tough without Hughes. Shes just looking for someone who is mourning just as much as she is. Its a common case. I hopes youll update soon.