Simply amazing. You write so beautifully and descriptively. I really enjoyed reading this. ^^
-rikku247

Gah! I've never read a fanfic that has made me want to cry! And i'm only on the 3rd chapter! Keep it up! *sniffle* Chap 3 is so heartbreaking...

omg is that the end? it was so cute love this story!
Amazing job!

I had some cereal at 3 am the other day... Sometimes breakfast is extra super-duper early. Marlene is adorable. xD Chocolate chip pancakes for everyone!

I'm sorry, but the "blue optics" thing really annoys me for some reason. As does Cloud and his whole "Everything's my fault" attitude, but that's just Cloud being Cloud. XP Story's good, though, or I wouldn't still be reading. I liked the interaction with the other bartender. Go knock some sense into him yeah!

Hrm, first thing I noticed is that it feels like you're shoving a lot of words in that don't necessarily fit the situation. Optics, cranium... also "visage on her face" is redundant. "The male stood" is kinda weird in this context.

Vocabulary words are fine and dandy, and the story is perfectly understandable, but it's more how you use them then which ones you use. Not saying you can't use them, but I feel like they don't flow very well here.

That said, I thought you did capture Cloud and Tifa's feelings very well, and the characterization is great. :)

and on another note... bras are mad uncomfortable to be wearing to sleep. XP Maybe someone like Tifa needs them. hur...

It's the end?
I just hope you can make a sequel or some sort of it.

aw yay! happy ending ^^ great story, welld one

oh clouds in trouble now!!
making tifa worry to much, thats not a good thing!

Like your story so far. Hope you manage to update soon. Oh and by the way... puss? And here I was just thinking that geostigma was just like this gigantic bruise on the infected area. I mean, that is what it looks like right? Well anyway, later. *prepares for emotional ** kicking*

Great Job! This is one of my very favorite stories. Cannot wait to read more!!

HO SNAPS!!
is it just the geostigma in him doing that, or is the geostigma adding to some underlying feelings...?
;D

wow! this is great, Denzel is very sweet and i love the way you showed Cloud's doubts before heading in. Cant wait to read more!

Hey, here's the not logged in MoriMemento XD.
Unfunny to forget the password. *sighs*

But I'm very glad that you've updated. Oh and btw: Cloud.should.finally.tell.Tifa.what's.wrong! He can act so...so...argh ._. That makes me emo.

=o