Great story love it!

The beginning of the story was good.

Most of the story is about them in Beverly Hills.

The main setting of the story was "The Science Center."

You have a few grammar and spelling mistakes.

It was a good short story.

This is a really fasinating story. I think you are a really good writer. But there is still some improvement you could've done. You could have let some one check the spelling for the story. Also, you could've write more things in the science center. A few more things

you could've done better is writting about some original jokes in the story, it will catch the reader's attention and addiction. Finally, you still can add some suspense in the story. Other than these, it's a extreme cool story.

The choice to write the story on fresh prince of bel-air was really great and that show it really funny, so is the story Tim wrote and it really well written and it contained some grammar and punctuation mistakes, but over all it was really good and I give it a 4/5.