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| 321 2008-05-11 ch 2, anon. | abusee! this is so good! oh my goodness, i loved axel in the first chapter, and sora is way too cute!! aw, and roxas is adorable, i love how he's quiet yet broke that guy's arm. haha, go roxy! anyways, awesome story, so please update soon! :D |
| The Critic Zoa 2008-01-28 ch 2,  | abuse*laughs* This is too funny! Between Cloud's lack of microwave expertise and Roxas & Namine's evil plots, I'm going to die of laughter! Things I like: Roxas can kick a$$. Namine is slightly evil. Axel is an outragous, flirtagious, pyoromaniac who likes to blow sh*t up. Riku blushes! Roxas's point of view, the way he views the world. Ex: The guy being a d**k, was 'Pink Shoes'. The only problem is that I had trouble identifing who the person was with the point of view switch. I don't realize for about a paragraph that this is Namine's POV and not Roxas's. Gah! *throws hands in air* Could you possibly do something about that? Anyways. This is a GREAT story. I'm really glad that I found Wonderful job. Please keep up the good work. ~The Critic, Zoa |
| Kira Sakura 2008-01-25 ch 2, | abuseThis is your best one yet! It's so cute and funny and cool and I love it! I was giggling and snickering and earning myself weird looks all the way! I love you and your writing. You have so much talent. One day I'm going pick up a famous book and say, 'I know the girl who wrote this' and no one is going to believe me but it'll be so true! I wish I could write as good as you... |
| .Nana Potato. 2008-01-17 ch 2, | abuse-NO THAT'S NOT FREAKING FAIR! -WHY THE HELL DO YOU ONLY HAVE 2 REVIEWS?! -THIS FIC IS f**KING AWESOME! -the switching of POV is enviously (on my part) detailed -and perfect, IMO -the way you create the characters is truly unique, -and you balance out the personl, slightly random (but i love randomness-winks-)and important info SO well -it makes me so...frustrated that true ART like this isn't being complimented enough, -while other, not as great, fics are getting a lot of glory -ugh, PLZ UPDATE SOON! -I LUV THIS STORY! PEACE!--randomness: withered peach skin scars a joy-- |
| Dragonlover149 2008-01-16 ch 2, | abuseThis is an awsome fanfic! Nami and Roxas are hilarious teasing Riku. Please update soon! |
| RinRan 2008-01-15 ch 2, | abuseHuh? No reviews yet? ...The world really is ending... Well, I must say: this really is a work of art. I love the different points of view and the detail of it. If I could compare your story to something, it would be...something cake-y. ...I don't know, that's the first thing I thought of while reading this. Cake. Hey, cake is pretty detailed and chock full of goodies. XD Keep up the work! Art's a bang! |