Kind of odd. Love the way you don't tell us the kid's name. Looking forward to seeing what happens next!

HAHAHA what a great ending beautiful story i hope you update it though so i'm going to put it on my story alerts!

Please Update(!),
MissDepp4eva

Hardcore! I've been waiting for an update forever, I'm so glad you haven't forgotten about this. I love the idea, I always wondered what would happen if Marla and the Narrator had a kid, and you've captured it realistically. I look forward to more (soon, I hope)!

ohh, very intresting, kid deffinatly has his pops personality : )

"She really really loves cigarettes, maybe even more than she loves Dad." Man, this line's awesome! And yeah, the characters were really in character.

This was really good. You wrote loyally to the movie. I could actually see this stuff happening if they ever did have a kid. You should continue to write more. It really impressed me.^^