Suh a sad fanfic... T-T

can u write alot of stories about the anime bakura ga ita ?

ei, yellow girl,,' your story is so nice,'

keep up the good work,' im looking for your next chapter...

This was beautiful, but very sad.

Stunning job.

Wow. Do you mean that's what happened? Really?

Aww. I felt bad for Yano. He was an idiot. He should have knew that Nana-chan will be always waiting.

Excuse me, I would like to conclude that there is a category here of Bokura ga ita. It is "We were there", you'll see it in one of the categories when making a story. If you don't see it when you look for a story under it's category is because no one has submitted a story in that category, TY.

plz tell me what happened next.. im a bif fan of bokura ga ita..

Stupid you left and made a promise,STICK WITH IT! Otherwise there will be a compramise and it will eat you up!(Conscience)..You have the means to communicate each other so that he/she will know he or she is besides else others might take the opportunity that is dear for is is story Satchiko-san!..()_!

hi.. so is this what really happened after Yano left for Tokyo, i mean, is this really what happened in the actual manga? i got really curious when i've read the summary and it appears to me that everything that happened in your story could possibly happen in bokura ga ita. please tell me, i'm really curious... thanks...

by the way, the plot was good, i liked it a lot... i am looking forward to the upcoming chapters because i'm not really satisfied of what happened in the end of chapter 1.. keep writing... _

The plot is nice. You've made me feel sad and sorry for Yano. The characters are in-character, though Takeuchi seems to be more agressive (It's still IC, I believe. It's logical for Takeuchi to be possessive of Nana when Yano leaves.).

You could work more sweat when it comes to your grammar. There are a couple of misspelled words and errors in grammar. Your style hasn't worked too great for me. Seeing a LONG paragraph actually deters me from reading it. You could've set off the dialogues and "liberate" them from the killer narrative.

Still, kudos for the first BGI (Bokura ga ita) fanfiction. I'm actually writing my own piece now, and if you may, please read it when I post.

Oh, thanks for reading this review. I should call you the Mother of the BGI fandom anyway. :)

Much appreciation,

henseishi-kun / Abnormality Words

PS: Do not turn this to a multi-chap. It'd lessen the impact of the story.

uhm..

hi..

i love bokura ga ita..

haha..

i have a comment to your fanfic..

it really is nice...

but..

the grammar is not that good..

but..

i really like the story you made..

thanks for writing it..

I love this story! thx ofr writing oh and u made a spelling mistake...anyways keep on writing!

Wait.. is this what really happened in the actual manga? Because I know that in the actual Bokura Ga Ita manga, Yano leaves Nana for 4 years and then his friend from the Tokyo highschool [also Nana's friend], finds him at a job.

Then, apparently the manga goes to a scene where Yano is on his way home and when he gets home, the reader finds that Yuri is in his house, folding laundry.

So is this story just a summary of the actual events in the Bokura ga Ita manga?

Anywho, wherever the story is from, I ABSOLUTLEY LOVE BOKURA GA ITA. heh And if you wrote the story, then I think it's really creative. But if it's from the actual manga, then I am PISSED at the author for making everything get so wild and out of hand. If Nana and Yano aren't together at the finale of Bokura Ga Ita, I swear I'm going to hate the manga/anime for the rest of my life. DX

Not to seem rude, but this fandom is Bokurano, not Bokura ga Ita. Sure, it doesn't have its own category yet, but you could have posted it in Misc. Sorry, but i hate it when people post fics to an unrelated fandom.

Also, I'd reccommend you get a beta, I can see that you're not a native English speaker, but that's alright so long you have some English-speaking friends who are willing to beta; i think there's also a forum in for that.

Here's another advice, when you add japanese, don't just translate some words and leave the others open to interpretation. (ie, wagatta)It's easier on the reader if you don't bother at all.

Now that the nasties are out of the way, I do commend you on your story. :D However, i'm not a big fan of bokura ga ita, so i can't say much about it, but i thought it was pretty decent. I must say, the characters were for the most part, in character- which is quite a feat for most new authors. So, continue on your story, its not that bad, but please do it in the correct fandom.