That story was awsome! It got my heart beating faster during several parts. You are a great writer. I could visualize the bridge so well. Thanks for a great story.

Jan

Great story! Really well written. Loved the exchange between Ronon and Sheppard. :0)

Definately lovin' the whumpage!

Haha! The hot blonde comment took me by surprise. I absolutely loved it.

Awesome fic! Loved it! I wouldn't mind reading another chapter :D focusing on when they're back at Atlantis.

I hope you don't mind, but in chapter 4 'BEGIN' should be 'BEGAN'. Thanks for writing!

This was great!! Well written, excellent details, great characterizations. I never could have guessed Ronon was hard for you to write-- I think you captured him perfectly. Great story!

Fanrific! A great wrap of a good story of hurt, comfort and team camaraderie. Not just from our four, but Carlson and Lorne too. Meant to add in a previous review that I really appreciated touching on Ronon's late wife. I think I pretty much summed up in earlier the praise of how well the characterizations are pulled off and I thank you also for pacing. Nothing was drawn out more so than needed, not even the end which I both realized had to end where it did as well as I wanted it to continue because of how wonderful this was written. Thank you for writing it and sharing it here!

Brava! Brava! Nice conversations between John and Ronon. It was like hearing their voices with the dialogue nailed so perfectly. Especially Ronon, and this will sound odd but even his pauses 'sounded' like Ronon, or rather those little non-commital sounds he sometimes makes as his contribution to conversations. I was particularly amused by the way the chapter began and ended with Murphy.

Magnificient! I love how the care the team has for each other shines through even though not one of them in this chapter states it explicitedly. From Rodney nearly joining John, to how forceful Teyla stopped him, and Ronon's quiet care, they showed the comradery with what they did and what they said. What I especially liked was how this chapter was written so well that I could picture it as scenes shot and at the same time like how this medium trumped seeing it. Like with listening to Rodney's and Teyla's interactions over the radio, much better than if it had been filmed. Anyway, looking forward to the chapters to come!

It is SO good to see you writing again! Nice beginning, establishing the situation so well, nailing characters, though I speak figuratively until the end of the chapter. Looking forward to the future chapters!

Nice bit of heart-stopping action at the end. Love Ronon's desire to look for that Murphy guy!!

Little happy dance because that was good old-fashioned whump. Fun story and hope you get a good kick in the ** again!

. . . "You realize in my retelling of this story you'll be a hot blonde instead, right?"

Priceless and very Sheppard.

Oh my gosh, must go to next chapter - but great descriptions! I have a very scary mental picture complete with sounds.

You still go the mojo. Loving it.