^^ love it.. ehe... I'm so glad that I read this one.. ehe it helped me to think of an idea.. =) thank you very much... =D

-le gasp- for an awesome oneshot :D

verysweet

very, very good! as great as your others, but different with the way you wrote. more description here. i like it. ♥

~SorasKey

so... beautiful... (is crying) lovely story, and insanely well written. I like the way you describe each scene, because somebody can really understand and see what is going on, and it really makes someone feel like they're right there watching.

Fantastic story!

Thats so cute! I love it! :D

I...loved it!! Hehehe, It was good! Especially when the two finally met up, talking to each other as if they were strangers although they knew each other...that was nice. The last line reminded me a lot of Kingdom Hearts!

=O

BEAUTIFUL! =O

its saddeningly beautiful =)

i didnt like it.

i loved it!

absolutely wonderful. :D great use of words and details!
love the title too ^_^ so cute

so its awkward for me to say this but contructive critcism is good, right? or er...advice. or something. whatever it is.

well, as much as i loved the details and words you expressed, i couldn't help but think maybe it was a little TOO much. maybe it's just me? *shrugs*
i dont like saying things like this because i could possibly be wrong. and i know my spelling and grammer and such is not too great >_> but i guess i am telling you this because i know you really want to become author (well you are one but...you know what i mean)
ah...er. how should i explain this. i think is is an..."eye sore" ,or however you want to call it, for people to read that. i dont know what you would call it. but i somehow things it is too much. like you are overly using strong words. i dont know how to explain it, or even how to word what i am saying. do you get it? >_<

and then, as i mentioned to you on yahoo, the whole meeting was awkward. i have read things were first you just call a character "he" until you know his name, and then the other person would just say and usually the audience/reader would be all *gasp* so that was kinda of cool technique. i like that one. but it didnt seem to fit because since they had not seen eachother for 4 years, and the story up until that point had kairi feeling sad and lonely, their reaction just did not fit. after hearing of Kairi's pain, the reader would most likely expect kairi to burst into tears, scream, or yell at sora with bitterness. they would also expect sora to show atleast some joy at first sight of kairi. but, i guess since she was crying, that would not make too much sense.

it probably ended a little soon, is my last critcism. a one-shot is not a short story, and can be emtremely long if the author wishes it to be. you are a great right that could have developed the ending a little bit more even if it took more time.

its hard to say these things to you, since i am really bad at writing and need to listen to my own advice.

but since this was a one-shot, i decided i thought maybe i should tell you all this

am i mean?


;_;


you are an amazing writer, Heather, i know you will continue to get better and better until you reach your dreams

"Distance can cause more pain than the mind can comprehend."

Ohboy. I was in a long distance relationship until last year, and let me tell you; that line was what my life thrived on.

Distance really fails at life; which is what ended the relationship, actually...but anyways

So cute. I could picture Sora so vividly with your description. His bright blue eyes; oh how I wish I knew someone with those eyes lol.

Really cute and I could relate to it so much... Thanks for writing it.

~Emerald31