This is interesting. Kinda twisted but interesting.

Wow... I've never read anything even remotely like this before. I love it! I'm not particularly a fan of femslash, but this is definitely remarkable to me. I don't want to sound emo or anything, but I also liked the fact that it didn't have a completely happy ending with Piper finding a cure and everything because that's how life really is. Awesome work.

o_o

You've just made my heart stop.

This is... just... I dunno. It's everything an avid reader could want from a work of fiction. The characterization, the drama, the hurt... good lord. @_@

Out of sheer, dumbstruck awe, I'm afraid I'm going to have to leave it at that and lie down for a moment...

oh man thats sad and deep but i really liked it it was different then you what you usually read about which is a good thing and i like your idea and i know you think that this story wasnt very good but i think it was great :)

wow . . . its not weird its just different but the way you wrote it it makes sens it was very sad though i m still lovin it

wow this is really interesting im lovin it so far and i love the concept too i need to read more :3

Well, besides the notion that Piper has gone absolutely crazy, I'm in awe of the story and how you portray the girls - it's heartbreaking. I feel rather incapable to writing more, because this is the kind of story that just screws with your mind and then some. (I love how this is connected to EGG, brilliant)

And damn, I have never wanted P/A to happen so badly. ;)

I dread to think what kind of obsession might enthrall me should you start writing an epic-length peice like the Limit.

When I saw in the school library that you had update, my friend had to literally push me down into the chair to keep from leaping with joy or convulsing like a maniac when the page wouldn't load!

So I finally finish it now. You borrowed from my idea, and leave everything... open.

Of course I love you keeping on with the world created in "egg". I love Cyclonis, her bitter and angry and damn awesome personality. You're growing as a writer right before my eyes, evolving to the next level of utter bad-assery! Next, it'll be a five-chapter story. Then, it'll be ten chapters. Next, THE WORLD! I mean, uh... you know. Longer-than-ten.

*cough* yea that's what I meant.

Waiting for the next story!

TTNR, The Dragonwings

Amazing. Disturbing.
I don't know WHAT to call it.
But I do know it bears all the hallmarks of a great work (in my experience). 1: it's about serious things; 2: it's extremely dark or extremely realistic, depending on your viewpoint; 3: it's controversial; 4: it's personally relatable to most everyone.
For me, the relatable-ness wasn't so much the sickness of course. It was more the insecurities and questions each character faced; the issues of right or wrong and of not knowing what direction to go, or of being bound to something.
I can't tell you whether this was a successful experiment or not, because 1: I'm not in a position to rate your work; and 2: I really don't know.
Whether it was a success or not, it truly was genius. The writing, the questions, the unique characterization (that still was not OOC)- all tied in beautifully with what (in my opinion) were the precisely right themes for this story.
I salute you.

And as to your A/N, on a more personal note, I think all of us care about the authors whose works we read. I certainly do.
I don't want to be nosey about your personal life, but I truly do hope that you manage all the cursed work, and that the huge step works out for you. Hang in there.

Well then. I really don't have much to say after this.

You're a very good writer. Yep. *nods*

I know how you feel, being overwhelmed and depressed about a huge step and the work it takes to make it...But you seem like a very strong person. I know you can get through it.

I kinda feel bad for Master Cyclonis. All those treatments, all those convulsions, all those injections. And, I agree with MC- Piper needs to leave this little hole on Kiros. Well, good job and please update soon!

I wanted to wait until this was finished before I submitted a review..sometimes, great stories end with not so great endings, breaking into little happily ever afters. This, though, was entirely different. I'm glad you took the risk with mutiple chapters, it added an incredible amount of depth.
Now, the story itself. ;__; It was interesting how you left Master Cyclonis' condition open for speculation, as well as whether the Dark Ace lives or not.
Despite the obvious creative liberties in fiction or fan fiction, there are so many connections that can be made from this story and it's ending, however vague. I don't know how you do it, but with every story you write, you continually top yourself.

Would you mind picking that up for me? Yeah, that there on the floor. I've got the other peices. Now, if only I could figure out too put it back together...

YA BROKE MY HEART. T_T

I'm serious, it was absolutely heartwrenching having to read about Piper telling the guys that she was leaving. It was...I couldn't...*holds back tears* GAH!

This chapter is incredibly well written, as always. Piper is fascinating here. What she is willing to do to increase her own knowledge is disturbing. It is incredibly selfish of her, and yet in a way, it's understandable.

I find it interesting that Aerrow let her get away with it. It's a testament to their friendship, I think. Which makes Piper's ability to toss such friendship so casually aside stand out even more.

I still feel sorry for Cyclonis. I know, I know. I can't help it. I just can't make myself believe that she deserves this disease. Especially with the history you write for her. She didn't really have much say over how she was going to turn out. Even though you have made a point of saying that she is a sadist, I can't help but think that that's more a product of how she was 'raised'. I don't know, whether you intended it or not, I think you've written an extremely sympathetic Cyclonis. The most sympathetic look at Cyclonis I've seen.

Of course, I'm ridiculously freaked out by blood, so I think maybe I'm a little too empathetic to her, because of that. I mean, really, that's a lot of bleeding. Creepy.

Speaking of, why is she sick? What was it that poisoned her while she was growing? Was it accidental? Intentional? If it was intentional, who did it? The old Cyclonis? Atmosian spies? I'm so confused.

Lastly, I'm really curious to know what became of Dark Ace. I was wondering about that at the end of the first chapter, and now doubly so at the end of the second. Is he dead? :-( Actually, if he is, he totally deserves it for betraying Cyclonis in Iron Maiden, hehe. Cross-story karma.

Hey there again.
Yes, it was long, but quite worth it. Don't worry about us getting bored. Still great, and beleivable. So... next chapter. Aerrow's POV? Or are you going to stick to Cyclonis and Piper all the chapters?
And I just wanted to rail a bit that you gave a distinct flavor of a Pierrow and then denied us. It was so sad... they'll never see each other again? And they might have to fight each other? Ack... it's so darn depressing. But, again, beleivable. Piper'd better fly with her new knowledge after all these sacrifices!
And I NEED to know what happens next!
Thumbs up!